启航教育作为考研英语培训领域的知名品牌，每年都会整理发布当年的考研英语作文模板高分范文。本文呈现的2011年考研英语一大作文批改例文中，每一处失分点都已被老师精准订正，是2027考生不可错过的写作资料。

一、考研英语一2011年大作文题目

考研英语一2011年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2011年大作文批改例文

As we can see from the depiction，a couple, sitting in a boat,which surrounded by all kinds of rubbish.Actually,it is a morning call to send us a message that we human being must take actions to protect environment.

When the issue of environmental protection gains a series of concerns from the public, can we still stand there,hesitating for what occurs？Several factors could wait heavier for this bad act,yet,suspended at the top of the list are the following two aspects.To begin with,habit is habit ,we are good at giving ourselves

sufficient excuses to throw garbage all around,what we always do in our daily life. If one example is needed I could not but mention the following well-know scientist,whose name is Edward,illuminating that a kind of habit representing a sense of spiritual existence,can never be changed as long as continuing for 47 days.Furthermore ,externally ,our society dont set up relative laws to punish this behavior,which leads to the consequence is distinct.

Fortunately that is not the day of judgement.It is undoubtely very time that we should take some available method to end up this appropriate doings,involving lay down effective regulations to restrict the environmental damage.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：which

批改：which is

原文： morning call

批改：wake-up call 让人警醒的事

原文：t is a morning call to send us a message that we human being must take actions to protect environment

批改：It is a ​​wake-up call​​ urging us that human beings must take action to protect the environment.

原文：sitting

批改：句子没有谓语动词，改为sit

原文：As we can see from the depiction，a couple, sitting in a boat,which surrounded by all kinds of rubbish.Actually,it is a morning call to send us a message that we human being must take actions to protect environment

批改：信息虽简洁，语法错误也很明显

原文： for

批改：about

原文：wait heavier for this bad act

批改：weigh heavily on this issue

原文：suspended at the top of

批改：topping the list​​

原文： ,

批改：句号，后面首字母大写

原文：what we always do in our daily life

批改：what从句不完整。

原文：needed

批改：后面加逗号

原文：know

批改：known

原文：continuing

批改：状语从句​​as long as it continues​​ for 47 days

原文：our society dont set up relative laws to punish this behavior,which leads to the consequence is distinct

批改：our society doesn’t establish relevant laws to punish this behavior, ​​which leads to distinct consequences.

原文：When the issue of environmental protection gains a series of concerns from the public, can we still stand there,hesitating for what occurs？Several factors could wait heavier for this bad act,yet,suspended at the top of the list are the following two aspects.To begin with,habit is habit ,we are good at giving ourselves sufficient excuses to throw garbage all around,what we always do in our daily life. If one example is needed I could not but mention the following well-know scientist,whose name is Edward,illuminating that a kind of habit representing a sense of spiritual existence,can never be changed as long as continuing for 47 days.Furthermore ,externally ,our society dont set up relative laws to punish this behavior,which leads to the consequence is distinct

批改：要保持语言的简洁性

原文：that

批改：前面加逗号

原文： method

批改：复数

原文：his appropriate doings

批改：these inappropriate behaviors

原文：nvolving lay down effective regulations to restrict the environmental damage

批改：such as laying down​​ effective regulations to curb environmental damage.

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10/20分。

1.作文内容包含基本全面，主题明确，层次清晰，语言要保持清晰，简洁，易懂；

2.尝试运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，但错误较多，如标点，拼写，主谓一致，从句非和固定搭配；

3.采用恰当的衔接手法，内容较为连贯；

4.文章原创度很高，很多句型和词汇都是自己写的，值得鼓励。同时要多学习老师讲的高分词汇和模板句型，取长补短，减少失误，加油！

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