一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2010年考研英语一批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语一大作文教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、考研英语一2010年大作文题目

考研英语一2010年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2010年大作文批改例文

As this cartoon shown, there is a hot-pot, fulfilled with various cultural elements, such as Kungfu. Laoshe, and BeiJing Opera. Cartoonist intends to convey to readers that diverse cultures that have positive and important role in our personal lives and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking, there are two points we need to pay attention. On the one hand, diverse cultures can iginite our creativity. nurture our souls, and promote our personal grorth and self-fulfillment, thus making our life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consumption. On the other hand, neqlecting learning diverse culture is like a heave chain that hinder our"s progress, depriving our ability to think independently,preventing us from shining brightly in social lives.

In fact, diverse cultures is the catalyst for our society, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively devote ourself to protect and learn it.

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三、考研英语作文批改

原文： shown

批改：shows

原文： that

批改：删除 此处不需要引导词

原文：s this cartoon shown, there is a hot-pot, fulfilled with various cultural elements, such as Kungfu. Laoshe, and BeiJing Opera. Cartoonist intends to convey to readers that diverse cultures that have positive and important role in our personal lives and in society.

批改：描述漫画内容，揭示漫画背后所反映的社会现象和深刻哲理，清晰直观。

原文：iginite

批改：ignite

批改：改为逗号

原文：grorth

批改：growth

原文：self-consumption

批改：self-consumpting

原文：neqlecting

批改：neglecting

原文：hinder

批改：hinders 第三人称单数形式

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking, there are two points we need to pay attention. On the one hand, diverse cultures can iginite our creativity. nurture our souls, and promote our personal grorth and self-fulfillment, thus making our life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consumption. On the other hand, neqlecting learning diverse culture is like a heave chain that hinder our"s progress, depriving our ability to think independently,preventing us from shining brightly in social lives.

批改：以分论点的形式论述这一现象背后的重要性，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：is

批改：are 注意主谓搭配一致

原文：protect

批改：protecting

原文：learn

批改：learning

原文：In fact, diverse cultures is the catalyst for our society, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively devote ourself to protect and learn it.

批改：总结全文，升华主题

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：14/20

这篇文章内容完整充实，结构清晰合理，逻辑严谨，层次分明，句型表达丰富。

词汇：考试时可以多积累高级词汇，写作文就能用上，但尤其注意单词拼写不要出现明显错误，特别是与主题词相关的单词要重点留意。

内容：第一段为传统的图画描述段，根据图画中的具体信息，尤其是下面的文字说明，进行直接描述。第二段以分论点的形式阐释图画寓意，文化的融合和交流问题，逻辑严谨，层次分明。最后一段表明作者本人对文化融合和交流这种现象的态度或看法，此评论部分可以提出建议，考虑背景及原因，或描述未来。

整体来看，作文理解了漫画内涵，段落框架明确，大体上与题目要求保持一致，但是在表达上还存在一定问题。从点评中可以看出作文中有一些表述不当之处，基本是由汉语思维习惯而造成的表达错误，主要体现在词汇使用和搭配不当，句子成分缺失混乱，同时也有一些时态和前后一致等细节问题，后续继续注重练习，加油！

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