考研英语二作文真题每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2013年考研英语二批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、2013年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2013年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the situation of doing a part-time job of students at a certain university. In freshman year, the precentage of doing a Part-time job was 67.77%. But by sophomore year, this rate had slowly increased to 71.13%. Meanwhile, the proportion of doing a Part-time job had experienced a significant increase of 16.17% from junior year to senior year.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the saying goes, " On the life"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowaday, university students are compelled to confront immense economy pressure, and as a result, taking a part-time job has emerged as their reluctant choice. Additionally, an increasing number of people believe that in modern society full of challenges, changes, and chances. More working experience is indispensable if they wish to find a good job in the future. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

what about future trend? I"m confident that the proportion of doing Part-time job at university will likely increase in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：precentage

批改：percentage

原文：Part-time

批改：小写

原文：Part-time

批改：小写

原文：16.17%

批改：从大三到大四，增幅我算的是16.31

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the situation of doing a part-time job of students at a certain university. In freshman year, the precentage of doing a Part-time job was 67.77%. But by sophomore year, this rate had slowly increased to 71.13%. Meanwhile, the proportion of doing a Part-time job had experienced a significant increase of 16.17% from junior year to senior year.

批改：对图表内容的描述不是很准确，本题的图表 只有四个数据，建议每个都直接写出来，不需要计算

原文：Nowaday

批改：Nowadays

原文：economy

批改：这里要用形容词economic

原文：. More

批改：逗号 +小写

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the saying goes, " On the life"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowaday, university students are compelled to confront immense economy pressure, and as a result, taking a part-time job has emerged as their reluctant choice. Additionally, an increasing number of people believe that in modern society full of challenges, changes, and chances. More working experience is indispensable if they wish to find a good job in the future. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：从经济压力和工作经验分析兼职比例上升的原因，注意拼写和词性

原文：what

批改：大写

原文：Part-time

批改：小写

原文：what about future trend? I"m confident that the proportion of doing Part-time job at university will likely increase in the following decades.

批改：表达个人观点，注意大小写

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10/15

题目要求：对图表信息的描绘可以更准确一些，个人观点及论述内容符合题意；

语言表达：全文用了较多的经典句式，但语法错误和拼写错误较多，导致内容表达上不够流畅清晰；如果目前还不能准确使用例句，也可以尝试用自己的语言表达，锻炼下语法水平；

行文逻辑：第一段描述题干内容，第二段详细论述，第三段表达个人观点，整体架构完整；

修改建议：改正原文错误；继续积累经典句式；提升语法水平；注意拼写的准确性；

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