考研英语一作文真题每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2013年考研英语一批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、考研英语一2013年大作文题目

考研英语一2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly, 2) interpret its intended meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2013年大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon, there are many graduates standing on the crossing of life and facing many choices, such as searching for jobs, continuing learning, going abroad or being a boss. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that making an accurate choice can play a positive and important role both in our personal lives and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, the road that matches what we expected can nurture our souls and promote our personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making our life meaningful and rewarding, rather than being self-consuming. On the other hand, the choice we don’t like is like a heavy chain that hinders our progress, preventing us from shining brightly in the future.

In brief, the accurate choice is like a catalyst for our social and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. We should actively advocate and support this practice. Only by doing so can we fully fulfill our aspirations and create a more happiness life.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文： graduates

批改：加逗号

原文：on the crossing of life

批改：改为 at the crossroads of life 是最常用的表达

原文：being a boss

批改：改为 starting a business 更合适

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图画内容, 表达的主题和图画也是贴合的

批改：语法正确

原文：an accurate

批改：改为 the right 是最常用最地道的搭配

批改：语法正确，表达也很好

批改：内容表达不错，也比较具体

原文：accurate

批改：改为 right

原文： more happiness

批改：此处为形容词比较级，改为 happier

批改：结尾段表达很好

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：15分/20分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明了个人观点，和图画的内容很贴合

语言表达：存在几处语法问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改，要细心 2. 主题词的选词要精确。之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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