考研英语作文批改命题趋势越来越关注社会热点与考生思辨能力。本文带来的2011年考研英语二批改范例，透过图表/图画深挖现象背后的本质，由启航教育老师逐段精批，可帮助考生建立稳定的考研英语写作思维框架。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

必须使用黑色字迹书写:在答题卡区域内作答,超出黑色矩形边框限定区域的答案无效。

The bar chart clearly depicts the number of supernatic for some brand to the China car on 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of China brand car was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 30%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand car experiened a significant deline of about 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of uS brand remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenonmenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to usily domestic care and have become the primary group. In addition, Chinese society is undersoing an extensive and profound transformation. I my view, the funddamental reason for this phenmenon is the significant progress made by china"s manufaturing in dustry in responding to these changes, considering these factors the deapic ted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising

what about trends? I am confident that proportion of China brand car will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Jampanese car will likely continue to decrease

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：supernatic

批改：拼写错误

原文：brand

批改：复数brands

原文：to the China car

批改：in Chinese car market

原文：on

批改：年份前加in

原文：to

批改：and

原文：China

批改：Chinese

原文：deline

批改：decline

原文：uS

批改：American代表美国的

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the number of supernatic for some brand to the China car on 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of China brand car was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 30%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand car experiened a significant deline of about 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of uS brand remained stable and steady.

批改：能够清晰的描绘图表中展现的内容，内容完整，注意避免小的语言错误。

原文：Against

批改：逗号后单词首字母小写

原文：usily

批改：using

原文：care

批改：cars

原文：undersoing

批改：undergoing

原文：funddamental

批改：fundamental

原文：phenmenon

批改：phenomenon

原文：china"s

批改：China"s

原文：manufaturing

批改：manufacturing

原文：,

批改：句号

原文：considering

批改：首字母大写

原文：deapic ted

批改：depicted

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenonmenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to usily domestic care and have become the primary group. In addition, Chinese society is undersoing an extensive and profound transformation. I my view, the funddamental reason for this phenmenon is the significant progress made by china"s manufaturing in dustry in responding to these changes, considering these factors the deapic ted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising

批改：能够运用逻辑关系词分析图表中现象的背后原因，全面细致。但是语言错误较多，需注意

原文：what

批改：开头单词首字母大写

批改：加future

批改：加the

原文：China

批改：Chinese

原文：Jampanese

批改：Japanese

原文：what about trends? I am confident that proportion of China brand car will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Jampanese car will likely continue to decrease

批改：分析并预测了未来的趋势，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：8/15

论述的内容全面，逻辑结构清晰，字数符合作文的要求，值得表扬，希望能够注意以下的小问题。

词汇方面：注意避免单词拼写错误，基础词汇一定要拼写正确，国家名作为专有名词首字母要大写，注意名词单复数的正确使用。

语法方面：要注意句子结构的完整。

其它细节：逗号后的单词首字母要小写以及一句话开头的单词首字母大写。

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