本文是一份经过启航教育整理的2011年考研英语二大作文批改资料，对照考研英语作文万能句型写作框架与评分标准进行精细讲解。无论是词汇句式、段落衔接还是逻辑展开，本文都能为考研英语考生提供可直接套用的范例。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

2011大作文

The bar chart clearly depicts the shares of part brands of car market in China from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of Chinese brands was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 32%. In contrast, the proportion of Japenese brands experienced a significant decline of about 9% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brands remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follow. To start with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s manufacturing industry in

responding to these changes In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using demestic car and have become the primary consumer group. Considering these factors the depilted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of Chinese brands is a clear sign of Social improvement and will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japenese brands will likely continue to decrease .

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：the shares of part brands of car market in China

批改：此处表达有点绕口，改为 the market shares of certain brands in the domestic car market 更地道

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容

批改：语法正确

原文：changes

批改：加句号，语法正确，内容表达也很好

原文：car

批改：可数名词单数形式不能单独存在，改为 cars

原文：demestic

批改：domestic

原文：depilted

批改：depicted

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

原文：Social

批改：此处首字母不需要大写

批改：结尾段表达很好

原文：Japenese

批改：注意拼写，且改为 Japanese and American 更合适

原文：Japenese

批改： Japanese

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处语法和拼写问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改 2.拼写要细心 3. 首字母大小写要规范，之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，试着多用自己的话来写，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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