对于考研英语一而言，2013年大作文常以图画形式呈现。本文精解的这篇图画批改范例，启航教育老师逐句解读图画细节、寓意提炼与评论展开三步走，是考研英语作文万能句型图画作文的经典教学样本。

一、2013年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2013年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart depicts the circumstance about students find a part time job at a certain university. It can be clearly found the percentage of students who will graduate is in the lead at 88.24%. And the Senior students take the second at 71.93% which is similar to whom lower than one grade. And the first grade students" percentage is lowest at 67.77%.

The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. First of all, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, they make great efforts to improve the development of economy and encourage students to take part time jobs, which helps students foster their skills of adaptation and independence in advance. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and flexible development, students who are going to graduate are willing to enhance themselves to strengthen their social competition.

What about the future trends, I am confidently think the percentage of forth grade student will increase in the future decates as well as others grades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：find

批改：改成非谓语finding

批改：加连字符-

批改：缺少连接词that

原文：Senior

批改：junior指大三

原文：whom lower than one grade

批改：改成：that of students one grade lower.关系代词 “whom” 使用错误：“whom” 是宾格关系代词，只能指代人，而此处要指代的是“lower than one grade（低一年级学生的占比）”，属于事物范畴，不能用 “whom”

原文：The bar chart depicts the circumstance about students find a part time job at a certain university. It can be clearly found the percentage of students who will graduate is in the lead at 88.24%. And the Senior students take the second at 71.93% which is similar to whom lower than one grade. And the first grade students" percentage is lowest at 67.77%.

批改：能够清晰的描绘图表中展现的内容，内容完整，注意避免小的语言错误。

原文：reason

批改：reasons

原文：they

批改：they指代不清

原文：part time

批改：part-time

原文：The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. First of all, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, they make great efforts to improve the development of economy and encourage students to take part time jobs, which helps students foster their skills of adaptation and independence in advance. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and flexible development, students who are going to graduate are willing to enhance themselves to strengthen their social competition.

批改：能够具体阐释出图表背后的真实意义，能够运用逻辑关系词连接句子，使得句与句之间衔接连贯，望继续保持。

原文：,

批改：问号

原文：am

批改：去掉，后面已经有动词think了

原文： forth grade student

批改：taking part-time jobs for senior students

原文：decates

批改：decades

原文：others

批改：others是名词，改成形容词other

原文：What about the future trends, I am confidently think the percentage of forth grade student will increase in the future decates as well as others grades.

批改：分析并预测了未来的趋势，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9/15

论述的内容全面，逻辑结构清晰，字数符合作文的要求，值得表扬，希望能够注意以下的小问题。

词汇方面：注意避免单词拼写错误，基础词汇一定要拼写正确，注意名词单复数的正确使用。

语法方面：注意一句话只能有一个谓语，代词的使用要在指代清晰的情况下。

内容方面：注意大一大二大三大四的正确单词表达

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