考研英语二真题每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2011年考研英语二批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

2011大作文

The bar chart depicts the market proportion of a part of brand in domestic automobile market from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the proportion of domestic brand was approximately 25%. But by 2009, the figure had substantially increased to about 33%. In contrast，the proportion of Japanese brand experienced a significant decline of about 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brand remained stable and steady.

The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made great efforts to support the domestic automobile which prominently enhanced the quality and quantity of domestic brand. In addition, against the back drop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, China"s manufacturing industry has made significant progress to follow the development.

What about future trands? I am confident that the proportion of domestic brand of automobile is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadly increase in the following decades. On the contrary, the Japanese brand will likely decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：The bar chart depicts the market proportion of a part of brand in domestic automobile market from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the proportion of domestic brand was approximately 25%. But by 2009, the figure had substantially increased to about 33%. In contrast，the proportion of Japanese brand experienced a significant decline of about 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brand remained stable and steady.

批改：用具体数据描述图表内容，清晰直观，但是建议在段落后面补充这些数据反映的社会现象

原文：back drop

批改：backdrop 中间没有空格

原文：The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made great efforts to support the domestic automobile which prominently enhanced the quality and quantity of domestic brand. In addition, against the back drop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, China"s manufacturing industry has made significant progress to follow the development.

批改：以分论点的形式论述这一现象背后的原因，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文： trands

批改：trends

原文：reason

批改：后文阐述了两个原因 这里建议用复数形式reasons

原文：steadly

批改：steadily

原文：What about future trands? I am confident that the proportion of domestic brand of automobile is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadly increase in the following decades. On the contrary, the Japanese brand will likely decrease.

批改：总结全文，升华主题，展望未来，立意深远。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13/15

这篇文章内容完整充实，结构清晰合理，逻辑严谨，层次分明，句型表达丰富。

词汇：考试时可以多积累高级词汇，写作文就能用上，但尤其注意单词拼写不要出现明显错误，特别是与主题词相关的单词要重点留意。

内容：在第二段分析原因时，我们可以有两个选择，一是只分析中国品牌占比上升的原因，二是可以加上日本品牌占比下降的原因，关于日本品牌占比下降的原因，可以写日本品牌一些不当行为导致其声誉下降，进而影响其销量等原因。

整体来看，没有细节错误，但要多用自己的语言去进行表达，避免和范文重复，后续继续注重练习，加油！

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