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2014年考研英语二大作文实例分析与批改

想要在2027考研英语写作中拿到高分?研读启航教育整理的2014年考研英语二批改范例就是捷径之一。本文范文紧扣考研英语二作文模板核心话题,从开头引入到结尾升华都做了精细打磨,是短期内快速提升考研英语写作水平的优质资源。

一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart depicts the number of the changes of the population in city and village from 1990 to 2010. In this chart, the number of the city population was 300 million in 1990. But by 2010, this figure had substantially increased to 666 million. In contrast. the number of village population experienced a significant decline of 160 million during the same period.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. First and foremost, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made great efforts to drive the economy and elevate purchasing power of civilian, which enables people afford to the department in the city which was regarded as luxury items. Whats more, against the backdrop of our country"s profound and dynamic development, it has an increasing trend of working opportunity which attracts younger generation to migrate to city to have a stable working condition.

What about future trends? I am confident that the number of city population will have a rapid increase in the following decades. On the contrary, the number of village population will continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文:the number of the changes of the population

批改:表述累赘且逻辑混乱,应改为 “the changes in the population size of urban and rural areas”(“城乡人口规模变化”)

原文:the number of the city population

批改:表述不规范,可简化为 “the urban population”

原文:the number of village population

批改:“the rural population”

批改:逗号

原文:department

批改:department指的是部门;部;处,这里使用 housing

原文:civilian

批改:需改为复数 “civilians”

原文:purchasing power of

批改:前面缺少定冠词 the,the purchasing power of civilians

原文:Whats more

批改:“What’s more”

原文: it has an increasing trend of working opportunity

批改:句式混乱,应改为 “the number of job opportunities in cities has been on the rise”

原文:The bar chart depicts the number of the changes of the population in city and village from 1990 to 2010. In this chart, the number of the city population was 300 million in 1990. But by 2010, this figure had substantially increased to 666 million. In contrast. the number of village population experienced a significant decline of 160 million during the same period.

批改:描述了图表内容,符合题目要求,但需要注意城市人口,乡村人口的表达

原文:The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. First and foremost, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made great efforts to drive the economy and elevate purchasing power of civilian, which enables people afford to the department in the city which was regarded as luxury items. Whats more, against the backdrop of our country"s profound and dynamic development, it has an increasing trend of working opportunity which attracts younger generation to migrate to city to have a stable working condition.

批改:使用了表示逻辑关系的连接词,表达了自己的观点,条理清晰

原文:What about future trends? I am confident that the number of city population will have a rapid increase in the following decades. On the contrary, the number of village population will continue to decrease

批改:对未来情况表示预测,符合结尾段的内容

四、考研英语作文评分

得分:11

这篇图表分析文围绕 “城乡人口数量变化” 展开,能清晰传递 “城市人口大幅增长、农村人口显著下降” 的核心信息。但在语法准确性、表达严谨性上存在较多问题,需重点优化。加强一些固定表达的背诵,另外写完作文整体检查一遍细节上的问题。希望继续努力,加油!

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