启航教育考研英语教研组精心筛选了2011年考研英语二大作文真题原文及高分批改范例。本篇范文中，老师对每一句都给出修改建议，是考研英语二写作技巧备考资料库中的精品，特别推荐给参加2027考研的学子。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in market shares of centain brands in the domestic car market from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the perentage of domestic brands was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rata had substantially rise to around 32%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese’ brands exprience a decline of 10% during the same period. Stimultaneausly, the percentage of Amercian brands remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the obsevved phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic cars and have become the primary consumer group. In addition Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profund transformation. In my view, the fundmental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress madle. by China"s manufacturing industry in response to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

what about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic brands will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand will likely continue to decreas

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：centain

批改：certain

原文：perentage

批改：percentage

原文：rata

批改：rate

原文：rise

批改：要用过去分词 risen

原文：’

批改：无生命名词所有格不用，‘应删除

原文：exprience

批改：要用过去时 experienced

原文：Stimultaneausly

批改：Simultaneously

原文：Amercian

批改：American

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in market shares of centain brands in the domestic car market from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the perentage of domestic brands was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rata had substantially rise to around 32%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese’ brands exprience a decline of 10% during the same period. Stimultaneausly, the percentage of Amercian brands remained stable and steady.

批改：描述了图表内容，拼写问题较多

原文：obsevved

批改：observed

原文：addition

批改：后加逗号

原文：profund

批改：profound

原文： fundmental

批改：fundamental

原文：madle

批改：made

原文：what

批改：大写

原文：brand

批改：要用复数 brands

原文：decreas

批改：最后一个单词应该是decrease，并且要加句号。 表达个人观点，注意单词拼写和单复数

原文：The core reasons for the obsevved phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic cars and have become the primary consumer group. In addition Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profund transformation. In my view, the fundmental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress madle. by China"s manufacturing industry in response to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：从消费群体和产业进步两方面分析国产汽车占比上升的原因，注意拼写和标点问题

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：8/15

题目要求：对图表信息描绘全面，个人观点及论述内容符合题意；

语言表达：全文用了较多的经典句式，但拼写和语法问题也较多，导致内容表达上不够流畅清晰。如果目前还不能准确使用例句，也可以尝试用自己的语言表达，锻炼下语法水平；

行文逻辑：第一段描述题干内容，第二段分析原因，第三段表达观点，架构完整；

修改建议：改正原文错误；继续积累经典句式；提高拼写的准确性；

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