备战2011年考研英语大作文，先从研读经典高分范文开始。本文汇集的启航教育批改范文中，不仅有原文、批注，还有词汇注释与亮点解析。准备2027考研的同学，可联系启航教育在线咨询考研英语二写作高分规划。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

what is clearly presented in the chart is that the proportion of three band of cars in domestic cars domain. The band of made in China has been increased, the JPAN has been declined, and the U S has been maintained the primary stand.

First of all, it is universally accepted that the progress in industry made it possible to accelerate the sale of domestic cars. With the improvement of domestic economic and industry, the domestic cars have been more poupular in the reigion.

In addition, this data reveals a reality is that the importance of innovation. We are forced and encouraged to forge more elites in this domain and pour more efforts to improve the quality of domestic cars.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：what

批改：大写

原文：chart

批改：改为bar chart更准确

原文：band

批改：要用复数brands

原文：cars domain

批改：改为automobile market更准确

原文：The band of made in China has been increased

批改：表达有误，可改为：The portion of domestic brand cars has increased

原文：the JPAN

批改：Japanese brands

原文：has been

批改：不需要被动语态，应删除

原文：the U S

批改：American brands

原文：has been

批改：不需要被动语态，应删除

原文：what is clearly presented in the chart is that the proportion of three band of cars in domestic cars domain. The band of made in China has been increased, the JPAN has been declined, and the U S has been maintained the primary stand.

批改：描述图表内容要结合图表中的具体数据，可以再思考下，另外要注意语法问题

原文：industry

批改：拼写错误，改为the automobile industry（汽车行业）更准确

原文：economic

批改：要用名词 economy

原文： industry

批改：要用复数 industries

原文：poupular

批改：popular

原文：reigion

批改：region

原文：been

批改：改为become（变得），更恰当

原文：is that

批改：结构混乱，应改为 of

原文：pour

批改：固定搭配，应该用make

原文：First of all, it is universally accepted that the progress in industry made it possible to accelerate the sale of domestic cars. With the improvement of domestic economic and industry, the domestic cars have been more poupular in the reigion.

批改：从行业进步和经济发展两方面展开论述，但第二点随着经济的发展导致国产汽车变得受欢迎，这个逻辑关系不是很明显，可以再思考下

原文：In addition, this data reveals a reality is that the importance of innovation. We are forced and encouraged to forge more elites in this domain and pour more efforts to improve the quality of domestic cars.

批改：图表题的结尾一般需要预测数据的发展趋势，这个图表跟呼吁创新没有明显的联系，可以以预测发展趋势作为结尾

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：5/15

题目要求：对图表的描述需要结合数据；立意和论述内容需要再思考下；

语言表达：全文有较多的语法问题，导致表达效果不佳。可以积累一些模板句并灵活使用，优化表达效果。

行文逻辑：第一段描述图标内容，第二段展开论述，第三段表达观点，架构完整；

修改建议：改正原文错误；优化文章立意和论述内容；积累经典句式；加强语法练习；

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