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一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

This is a column chart that clearly illustrates the dramatic changes in the market shares of domestic, American, and Japanese car brands in China from 2008 to 2009.

During the period, the share of domestic brands ascended remarkably reaching approximately 33%. By contrast, sales of Japanese brands showed a sharp decline, from 35% to 26%. Meanwhile, the percentage of American brands remained stable at n% Such a statistics can be naturally associated with. the fierce competition in China"s car market. Firstly, Chinese domestic car brands have been developing, and now domestic consumers are more willing to purchase diomestic cars. In addtions, China and Japan relations have become tense in recent years, it leadt to Japanese brands cars in China have decreased. At the same time. the sales of Chinese cars abroad are also increasing, which demonstrates the competitiveness of domestic cars in world. The Chinese people are very proud of this phenomenon.

As a result, Chinese cars manufacturers are supposed to pay more attention to domestic market due to its great potential. If they do their utmost, the future of the domestic car brands industry will be hopeful.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：a

批改：car不能丢

原文：a

批改：car

原文：n

批改：car不能丢

原文： at n%

批改：at 11%.

原文： a

批改：删掉

批改：删掉句号

原文：stic, American, and Japanese car brands in China from 2008 to 2009. During the period, the share of domestic brands ascended remarkably reaching approximately 33%. By contrast, sales of Japanese brands showed a sharp decline, from 35% to 26%. Meanwhile, the percentage of American brands remained stable at n% Such a statistics can be naturally associated with. the fierce competition in China"s car market.

批改：这是第一段，结构需要明确一下哦。三段论，内容要分布均匀，不能杂糅哦，整体比较到位，但是数据有丢的，car丢了的，表述一定要完整。

原文：it lea

批改：前面是一个完整的句子，这里要注意语法问题。可以这样改，改为which makes the number of Japanese car brands become less and less.

原文：nds cars

批改：car brands

原文：wo

批改：the world

原文：hinese domestic car brands have been developing, and now domestic consumers are more willing to purchase diomestic cars. In addtions, China and Japan relations have become tense in recent years, it leadt to Japanese brands cars in China have decreased. At the same time. the sales of Chinese cars abroad are also increasing, which demonstrates the competitiveness of domestic cars in world. The Chinese people are very proud of this phenomen

批改：第二段写的比较贴合现实，接地气，能看出来考生自己写的，简单句没啥问题，复合句，从句写的语法错了很多，说明语法知识还需要加强 ，可以多写点简单句

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9/15

语法：语法注意标点，句子的各项成分都不能丢哦，主谓宾，主系表，一个句子只有能一个谓语，除非是主从复合句。

逻辑：整体逻辑可以的，整体很通顺。

词汇：单词整体还行，也有写错的哦。

内容：内容比较符合题意要求，结构合理。

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