本文整理了2016年考研英语二大作文真题原文及高分批改例文，是备考考研英语写作冲刺的实用素材。考研英语作文在考研英语中占据重要分值，历年真题范文能够帮助考生快速把握命题规律与评分要点，下面让我们一同走进这篇批改范文。

一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of some tourist purposes among students from a

certain university. Enjoying the scenery takes the lead at 37%, followed by relieving the pressure at 33%. Additionally, factors such as making a lot of friends, cultivating independence, and other purposes are also considered, accounting for 9%, 6%和15%.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of high-speed advancement of society, people are no longer content with mere material satisfaction, they also pursue a broad perspective on the world. This explains why a large number of students choose to enjoy different sceneries through traveling. In addition, as the saying goes, "On life"s stage, pressure is always present”Nowadays, university students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure, and as a result, traveling has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time.

What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of university students, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：tourist

批改：是旅行者，改成tourism旅游

原文：和

批改：and

原文：The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of some tourist purposes among students from a certain university. Enjoying the scenery takes the lead at 37%, followed by relieving the pressure at 33%. Additionally, factors such as making a lot of friends, cultivating independence, and other purposes are also considered, accounting for 9%, 6%和15%.

批改：能够准确地描绘出图表的信息，句子连贯完整。

原文：,

批改：分号

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of high-speed advancement of society, people are no longer content with mere material satisfaction, they also pursue a broad perspective on the world. This explains why a large number of students choose to enjoy different sceneries through traveling. In addition, as the saying goes, "On life"s stage, pressure is always present”Nowadays, university students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure, and as a result, traveling has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time.

批改：能够具体阐释出图表背后的真实意义，能够运用逻辑关系词连接句子，使得句与句之间衔接连贯，望继续保持。

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of university students, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

批改：能够对图表中的现象进行总结和预测，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，要注意正确选词；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变，但是要注意两个分句之间用分号连接；语法方面，总体来看语法基础没有问题。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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