备战2016年考研英语大作文，先从研读经典高分范文开始。本文汇集的启航教育批改范文中，不仅有原文、批注，还有词汇注释与亮点解析。准备2027考研的同学，可联系启航教育在线咨询考研英语二写作高分规划。

一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of various purposes of travelling among students at a certain college. Enjoying senary takes the lead at 37%, followed by relieving pressure at 33%. Additionally, factors such as making friends extensively, fostering indepedant ability and others are also be considered, accounting for 9%, 6% and 15%, respectively

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To strart with, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of the society, people are no longer content with mere material satisfaction, they also pursue spiritual enjoyment, this explain why an increasing number of young people travelling for enjoying senary and find the beauty of nature, which can nurture their souls. In addtion, as the saying goes, "On life"s stage, pressure is always present,” Nowadays, university students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure, and as a result, relieving pressure has emerged as the main choices for travelling.

What about the future trends? I"m confident that the statistical figures has accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of university students ,seving as a microcosmof the changes in the era and will likely remian relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

批改：语法正确

原文：indepedant

批改：independent

原文：respectively

批改：记得加句号，开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容

原文：senary

批改：此处表示风景，改为 the scenery

批改：语法正确

原文：strart

批改：start

原文：the

批改：society 前面不能加 the, 删去

原文： they

批改：逗号不能连接两个完整的句子，此处可加连接词，改为 and they

原文：,

批改：逗号不能连接两个完整的句子，此处可改为句号

原文：this

批改：前面改为句号后，此处首字母大写

原文：explain

批改：此处要用谓语动词的三单形式, 改为 explains

原文： travelling

批改：从句缺少谓语动词，改为 choose to travel

原文：senary

批改：此处表示风景，改为 the scenery

原文： find

批改：改为 finding，与 enjoying 并列

原文：choices

批改：此处特指减轻压力这个选择，改为 choice

批改：内容表达不错，也比较具体，多注意语法问题

原文： has

批改：删去，此处用一般现在时即可，且现在完成时的正确表达为 has reflected

原文：era

批改：加逗号

批改：结尾段内容表达不错

原文：for travelling

批改：改为 to travel 更合适

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处语法和拼写问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改 2. 拼写要细心，之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，加油！

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