2016年考研英语二大作文是启航考研英语备考清单中的必练题型。本文带来的高分批改范例，配套启航教育老师的逐句批注与预测话题标签，适合考研英语考生在冲刺阶段精读精练，是一套完整的写作提升资料。

一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of various purposes of traveling among students at a certain university. Enjoying the scenery takes the lead at 37%, followed by diffusing the pressure at 33%. Additionally, factors such as making friends, cultivating independence, and others are also considered, accounting for 9%, 6% and 5%, respectively.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people are no longer content with mere material satisfaction, the also pursue spiritual enjoyment. This explains why an increasing number of students choose travel to enjoy scenery. In addition, as the saying goes,” On life’s stage, pressure is always present.” Nowadays, university students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure, and as a result, traveling has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of university students, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：5%

批改：是15%，注意认真审题

原文：The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of various purposes of traveling among students at a certain university. Enjoying the scenery takes the lead at 37%, followed by diffusing the pressure at 33%. Additionally, factors such as making friends, cultivating independence, and others are also considered, accounting for 9%, 6% and 5%, respectively.

批改：能够清晰的描绘图表中展现的内容，内容完整，注意数字的准确性

原文：the

批改：they

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people are no longer content with mere material satisfaction, the also pursue spiritual enjoyment. This explains why an increasing number of students choose travel to enjoy scenery. In addition, as the saying goes,” On life’s stage, pressure is always present.” Nowadays, university students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure, and as a result, traveling has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：能够细致分析图表中现象产生的原因，句子结构连贯完整。

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of university students, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

批改：能够对图表中的现象进行总结和预测，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，基础词汇掌握的较好；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变；语法方面，总体来看语法基础没有问题。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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