思想品质、教育文化是考研英语大作文的高频命题方向，本文呈现的2011年考研英语二批改范例正是聚焦这一主旨。启航教育老师透过文章结构、衔接表达和结尾升华三方面，逐段展示了一篇考研英语写作冲刺高分范文的诞生过程。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts proportions of some certain brands in domestic car market in 2008 and 2009. In 2008. the percentage of the chinese brands was approximately 25%. But in 2009,the rate had risen to around more 30%. In contrast, the proportion of the Janpanese brand experiences a significant decline of 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the proportion of the American band remains stable and steady

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and particularly dynamic development, the younger generation,those born in the 1990s and 2000s are accustomed to driving domestic cars and become the primary customer group. In addition,the Chinese market is undergoing a profound and extensive changes. In my views, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon metioned above is the significant progress made by china"s manufacturing in responding to these changes, considering these factors, the dipictect phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising

what about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic car brand will steadily increase the in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of the Japanese brand will likety continue to decrease

三、考研英语作文批改

批改：逗号

原文：chinese

批改：国家名首字母大写

原文：Janpanese

批改：Japanese

原文：experiences

批改：过去时experienced

原文：remains

批改：remained

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts proportions of some certain brands in domestic car market in 2008 and 2009. In 2008. the percentage of the chinese brands was approximately 25%. But in 2009,the rate had risen to around more 30%. In contrast, the proportion of the Janpanese brand experiences a significant decline of 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the proportion of the American band remains stable and steady

批改：能够清晰的描绘图表中展现的内容，内容完整，注意避免小的语言错误。

原文：Against

批改：逗号后的单词小写

批改：加逗号断句

批改：加have

原文：a

批改：去掉a，和后面的changes矛盾

原文：views

批改：view

原文：china"s

批改：China"s

原文：,

批改：句号

原文：considering

批改：首字母大写

原文：dipictect

批改：depicted

原文：re reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and particularly dynamic development, the younger generation,those born in the 1990s and 2000s are accustomed to driving domestic cars and become the primary customer group. In addition,the Chinese market is undergoing a profound and extensive changes. In my views, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon metioned above is the significant progress made by china"s manufacturing in responding to these changes, considering these factors, the dipictect phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising

批改：能够运用逻辑关系词分析图表中现象的背后原因，全面细致。

原文：what

批改：首字母大写

原文：the

批改：去掉

原文：what about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic car brand will steadily increase the in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of the Japanese brand will likety continue to decrease

批改：分析并预测了未来的趋势，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误，国家名是专有名词首字母要大写，还要注意冠词的正确使用；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变，但是要注意句子结构的完整，要正确使用标点断句；

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的比较认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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