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一、2023年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2023年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your essay, you should 1) describe and interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. Write your answer in about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2023年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The line chart clearly depicts the changes of health literacy among people in china from 2012 to 2021. In 2012, the proportion of health literacy was 8.40%, but by 2021, this proportion had significantly increase to 25.40%.

The core reasons for the observed phenomernon can be summarized as follows. First and foremost, as a conducter orchestrating the symphony of society, our government has made tremendous effort to build a sound health literary system and drive economic growth, enabling more residents to enjoy health literacy service. Additionally, health has impacted every aspects of our life, significantly altering people"s behaviors and choice, and as a result, an increasing number of people have started to pay more attention to health literacy. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the line clart is unsurprsing. What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of health literacy will likely continue to increase in the following decades. Because people also pursue health"s enjoyment.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：china

批改：首字母大写

原文：increase

批改：increased

原文：The line chart clearly depicts the changes of health literacy among people in china from 2012 to 2021. In 2012, the proportion of health literacy was 8.40%, but by 2021, this proportion had significantly increase to 25.40%.

批改：能够完整地描绘出图表的信息，句子连贯。

原文：phenomernon

批改：phenomenon

原文：conducter

批改：conductor

原文：effort

批改：复数

原文：literary

批改：literacy

原文：aspects

批改：aspect

原文：choice

批改：复数

批改：逗号

原文：Because

批改：小写

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomernon can be summarized as follows. First and foremost, as a conducter orchestrating the symphony of society, our government has made tremendous effort to build a sound health literary system and drive economic growth, enabling more residents to enjoy health literacy service. Additionally, health has impacted every aspects of our life, significantly altering people"s behaviors and choice, and as a result, an increasing number of people have started to pay more attention to health literacy. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the line clart is unsurprsing. What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of health literacy will likely continue to increase in the following decades. Because people also pursue health"s enjoyment.

批改：能够运用逻辑关系词对图表中的现象进行分析论述，注意避免小的语言问题。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误，名词单复数要使用正确，国家名首字母要大写；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变，但是要注意句子结构的完整；

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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