思想品质、教育文化是考研英语大作文的高频命题方向，本文呈现的2013年考研英语二批改范例正是聚焦这一主旨。启航教育老师透过文章结构、衔接表达和结尾升华三方面，逐段展示了一篇考研英语作文真题范文高分范文的诞生过程。

一、2013年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2013年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The chart records the situation of the part-time job about some college students.

Specifically, the proportion of students who have part-time job is on rise from freshman to senior.The percentages of the part-time job about freshman,sophomore,junior and senior are 67.77，71.13，71.93 and 88.24 respectively.

In my view, the increased percentages of part-time job about college students can be attributed to a host of factors,among which two are analyzed as follows.In the first place, the growth of college students has to some extend contributed to this change.With the rise of age,they become maturer and maturer, and they realize their own responsibility in family.Secondly, government support also plays a key role in this phenomenon. In fact, a series of effective and favorable places have been implemented to facilitate the development of occupation opportunity.

Based on what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that the phenomenon will continue to gather momentum in the coming years. And I believe more and more college students will be maturer.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：67.77，71.13，71.93 and 88.24

批改：需要补充百分号

原文：e chart records the situation of the part-time job about some college students. Specifically, the proportion of students who have part-time job is on rise from freshman to senior.The percentages of the part-time job about freshman,sophomore,junior and senior are 67.77，71.13，71.93 and 88.24 respectively.

批改：用具体数据描述图表内容，清晰直观，但是建议在段落后面补充这些数据反映的社会现象

原文：extend

批改：extent

原文：n my view, the increased percentages of part-time job about college students can be attributed to a host of factors,among which two are analyzed as follows.In the first place, the growth of college students has to some extend contributed to this change.With the rise of age,they become maturer and maturer, and they realize their own responsibility in family.Secondly, government support also plays a key role in this phenomenon. In fact, a series of effective and favorable places have been implemented to facilitate the development of occupation opportunity.

批改：以分论点的形式论述这一现象背后的原因，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：Based on what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that the phenomenon will continue to gather momentum in the coming years. And I believe more and more college students will be maturer.

批改：总结全文，升华主题

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13/15

这篇文章内容完整充实，结构清晰合理，逻辑严谨，层次分明，句型表达丰富。

内容：从图表中可以看出，大四学生兼职的比例远高于他们的师弟师妹们(这也在情理之中)。所以考生可以在作文的中间段分析为什么大四学生兼职的比例明显高于其他年级。当然，考生也可以给出些建议，诸如兼职虽好，但也要理性选择，否则可能会浪费时间和精力。

整体来看，主要是细节错误，要多用自己的语言去进行表达，避免和范文重复，后续继续注重练习，加油！

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