思想品质、教育文化是考研英语大作文的高频命题方向，本文呈现的2011年考研英语二批改范例正是聚焦这一主旨。启航教育老师透过文章结构、衔接表达和结尾升华三方面，逐段展示了一篇考研英语写作冲刺高分范文的诞生过程。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the percentage of different brands in Chinese car market in 2008 and 2009. In 2008, the percentage of domestic brand was approximately 26%, but by 2009, this rate had gradually risen around 33%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand experienced a significant decline about 7% from 2008 to 2009. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brand remained stable.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, against the backrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particular those born in 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic car and become the primary consumer group. In addition, Chinese society is undegoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s moto industry in responding to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the propotion of domestic brand in China"s car market will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the propotion of Japanese brand and American brand will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

批改：加to，增加到

批改：少介词of

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the percentage of different brands in Chinese car market in 2008 and 2009. In 2008, the percentage of domestic brand was approximately 26%, but by 2009, this rate had gradually risen around 33%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand experienced a significant decline about 7% from 2008 to 2009. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brand remained stable.

批改：能够较为准确地描绘出图表的信息，句子连贯完整。

原文：backrop

批改：backdrop

原文：moto

批改：auto

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, against the backrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particular those born in 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic car and become the primary consumer group. In addition, Chinese society is undegoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s moto industry in responding to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：能够运用逻辑关系词分析图表中现象的背后原因，全面细致。

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the propotion of domestic brand in China"s car market will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the propotion of Japanese brand and American brand will likely continue to decrease.

批改：分析并预测了未来的趋势，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误；句式和语法方面，要注意句子结构的完整，不要缺少成分；

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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