对于考研英语一而言，2011年大作文常以图画形式呈现。本文精解的这篇图画批改范例，启航教育老师逐句解读图画细节、寓意提炼与评论展开三步走，是考研英语作文话题图画作文的经典教学样本。

一、考研英语一2011年大作文题目

考研英语一2011年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2011年大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon, there are two visitors, sitting on the boat and throwing the rubbish into river, which makes this river very dirty. Evidently, the cartoon intends to convey to readess that environmental protection is an issue that requires great attention both in our personal lives and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-prouoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, environmental protection holds exceptional significance for a nation, as it serves as a crucial comerstone for safeguarding public health further propelling social stability and sustainable developm-ent. On the other hard, nealecting environmental protection is like a heavy chain that hinders our nation"s progress, not only hindering its ability to montain healthy and rapid growth but also significantly affecting its international image.

How can we put an end to the probicm of environmental pollution sswng It is suggested by many that we need a package deal, including issite related laws and instilling the idea of environmental protection into students. But would these measurees be comprehensive enough? in reality, we also need to strenghen self-discipline. With tthe supp-ort of these measure. we can effectively tackle the issue at its core.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：As shown in the cartoon, there are two visitors, sitting on the boat and throwing the rubbish into river, which makes this river very dirty. Evidently, the cartoon intends to convey to readess that environmental protection is an issue that requires great attention both in our personal lives and in society.

批改：能够完整全面的描述出图画中的现象，并能够直接点明作文的主题。

原文：prouoking

批改：provoking

批改：加逗号断句

原文：hard

批改：hand

原文：nealecting

批改：neglecting

原文：montain

批改：maintain

原文：This phenomenon is thought-prouoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, environmental protection holds exceptional significance for a nation, as it serves as a crucial comerstone for safeguarding public health further propelling social stability and sustainable developm-ent. On the other hard, nealecting environmental protection is like a heavy chain that hinders our nation"s progress, not only hindering its ability to montain healthy and rapid growth but also significantly affecting its international image.

批改：论述的内容较为全面，运用逻辑关系词使得句与句之间衔接较为紧密。注意避免小的语言错误。

原文：probicm

批改：problem

原文： sswng

批改：去掉，加问号

原文：issite

批改：issuing

原文：measurees

批改：measures

原文：measure

批改：measures后加逗号

原文：How can we put an end to the probicm of environmental pollution sswng It is suggested by many that we need a package deal, including issite related laws and instilling the idea of environmental protection into students. But would these measurees be comprehensive enough? in reality, we also need to strenghen self-discipline. With tthe supp-ort of these measure. we can effectively tackle the issue at its core.

批改：该段能够针对图画现象提出自己的解决措施，注意避免拼写错误。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：14/20

内容切题，准确全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯，但是要注意正确使用标点符号断句；语法方面，语法基础较好。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的比较认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节性错误会更好。继续加油。

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