思想品质、教育文化是考研英语大作文的高频命题方向，本文呈现的2013年考研英语二批改范例正是聚焦这一主旨。启航教育老师透过文章结构、衔接表达和结尾升华三方面，逐段展示了一篇考研英语作文真题范文高分范文的诞生过程。

一、2013年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2013年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the proportion of taking part time job in the university.In the first year, here the percentage of taking part time job was approximately 67.77%. At the meantime, in the senior, about 60% of the people to taking part time job. We can know that percentage is increaing from fish man to senior.

The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, an increating youny number of people believe that in modern society full of challenge. changes and chances. social practice is indispensable if they want to achieve success in the long run. In addition, as the saying goes," in life"s stage, pressure is always present " Nowadays, many university students want to help their familly decrease the pressure of economic, this explains why an increaing percentage from freshman to senior of taking part time jobs in the untversity .

In the wake of the high-speed advancement of society .I"m confident that the proportion of taking part time jobs will steadily increase in the futhure year.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：part time job

批改：缺少连字符，改为 part-time job

原文：here

批改：删除

原文：At the meantime

批改：固定搭配错误，改为 in the meantime或 at the same time

原文：in the senior

批改：改为 in the senior year

原文：to taking part time job.

批改：缺少谓语动词，改为 take part-time jobs.

原文：increaing

批改：单词拼写错误，改为 increasing

原文：fish man

批改： freshman

原文：60%

批改：数字错误

原文：increating

批改： increasing

原文：youny

批改：young

原文： in modern society full of challenge

批改：believe that...引导的宾语从句不完整，改为 believe that modern society is full of challenges, changes, and opportunities.

原文： an increating youny number of people

批改：语序错误，改为 an increasing number of young people

原文：familly

批改： family

原文：economic

批改： economics

原文：increaing

批改：increasing

原文：untversity

批改：university

原文：in

批改：介词使用错误，改为 On

原文：futhure

批改： future

原文：year.

批改：删除

批改：逗号

原文：part time

批改：同上

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：6 /15

从结构层面看，本文脉络清晰，采用三段式写作，开头清楚表明图片，中间进行了分析，最后做出了总结；

从内容层面看，大体上描述了柱状图的变化，分析几点原因，做出合理预测；

从语言层面看，单词拼写错误太多，语序也有问题，从句缺少句子成分，介词搭配错误。

建议：检查单词拼写，大小写、标点符号，多积累短语的固定用法，介词搭配。参考模板句去对照是否缺少成分。加油！

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