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一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the change of part

brand markec shares about domestic car market in 2008 and 2009. The percentage of domestic brand was approrimately 25% ,but by 2009,this rate has nsen to around 30%. On the contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand experienced a decline of about 5% during the some from 2008 to 2009. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brand remained stable and steady.

The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our goverment has made tremendous efforts to drive economic growth and elevate the the purchasing power of the populace, allowing them to afford automobiles that were previously deemed luxary items. In aldition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic developeent, the younger gencration, particularly those born in the 1900s and 2000s, are accustomed to uising domestic automobilec and have become the primary consumer group.

What about the future trend? I am condifident that proportion of domostic automobiles will staddily increase in the following decades. In constrast, the proportion of foreign automobliles will likely decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：part brand markec shares about domestic car

批改：part brand markec shares 存在拼写错误，应为 part of the brand market shares（部分品牌市场份额）。更地道的说法是 the market shares of certain car brands

原文：out domestic car market in 200

批改：about domestic car market 介词使用不当，应改为 in the domestic car market

原文： approrimately

批改：approrimately 拼写错误，应为 approximately。

原文：as nse

批改：has nsen 拼写和时态错误，应为 had risen。

原文：On the contra

批改：On the contrast 搭配错误，固定短语是 In contrast。

原文：uring the some

批改：during the some from 表意不清，应为 during the same period from

原文： bar chart clearly depicts the change of part brand markec shares about domestic car market in 2008 and 2009. The percentage of domestic brand was approrimately 25% ,but by 2009,this rate has nsen to around 30%. On the contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand experienced a decline of about 5% during the some from 2008 to 2009. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brand remained stable and steady.

批改：描述段完成了任务，但存在拼写和语法错误

原文：goverme

批改：goverment 拼写错误，应为 government

原文：levate the

批改：elevate the the 重复了 the

原文： luxary

批改：luxary 拼写错误，应为 luxury。

原文：In aldition

批改：In aldition 拼写错误，应为 In addition。

原文： develope

批改：developeent 拼写错误，应为 development

原文：gencration

批改：gencration 拼写错误，应为 generation

原文：900s and 2

批改：1900s 指20世纪，即1900-1999年，与“2000s”矛盾且不符合语境，应为 1990s and 2000s（90后和00后）。

原文： uising domestic automobilec and have become the prima

批改：uising 拼写错误，应为 using。 automobilec 拼写错误，应为 automobiles。

原文：e core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our goverment has made tremendous efforts to drive economic growth and elevate the the purchasing power of the populace, allowing them to afford automobiles that were previously deemed luxary items. In aldition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic developeent, the younger gencration, particularly those born in the 1900s and 2000s, are accustomed to uising domestic automobilec and have become the primary consumer group.

批改：分析段有正确的方向，但论证的深度和针对性不足，且语言错误较多

原文：ndifident that proportion

批改：condifident 拼写错误，应为 confident。 proportion 前缺冠词，应为 the proportion

原文：domostic automobiles will staddily increase in the following decades. In constrast, the proportion of foreign automobliles will likely decrease.

批改：domostic 拼写错误，应为 domestic。 staddily 拼写错误，应为 steadily。 In constrast 拼写错误，应为 In contrast。 automobliles 拼写错误，应为 automobiles。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10分

优点：结构完整，覆盖了内容要点。

主要失分点：

语法与词汇：全篇存在大量且严重的拼写错误，严重影响理解和专业性。

内容逻辑：第二段原因分析不够贴切、深入。

总评与修改建议：

请务必将你高频拼错的词建立一个清单，例如：

government, development, generation, domestic, confident, steadily, contrast, automobiles, addition, approximately

在下次写作后，必须专项检查这些词的拼写。

针对“国产品牌份额上升”，请使用更直接的原因：

产品力提升：国产品牌在质量、设计、安全性上的巨大进步。(Dramatic improvements in the quality, design, and safety of domestic cars.)

性价比与价值：提供比外国品牌更具竞争力的价格和更丰富的配置。(Better value for money and more features compared to foreign brands.)

费者认同感：市场营销和民族自信的提升，使年轻消费者更青睐国货。(Enhanced marketing and growing national pride make domestic brands more appealing to the youth.)

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