启航教育作为考研英语培训领域的知名品牌，每年都会整理发布当年的启航考研英语高分范文。本文呈现的2017年考研英语一大作文批改例文中，每一处失分点都已被老师精准订正，是2027考生不可错过的写作资料。

一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目

考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand cartoon, there is a man sitting in his - sofa and saying" I have so much books!", on the contrary. in the right-hand cartoon, a man sitting in his chair and saying" I try my best to read 20 books this year.”Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that active action is the brush paints bright future, while neglecting active action is the shackle that hinders progress.

The phenomenon is thought-provoking in servial ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foromost, active action can ignite our creativity and promote personal growth and self-fulfilment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than self-consuming. What is more, in mordern society full of changes, chances and challenges, perseverance has become a key factor that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people, and its significance has become increasing evident.

In brief, active action is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice, additionally, we must be actuely aware of the detriment effects of negjecting active action to ensure our growth stays on course.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：much

批改：改成many修饰可数名词

原文：,

批改：句号

原文：on

批改：首字母大写

批改：逗号

批改：加谓语is

批改：加that引导定语从句

原文：In the left-hand cartoon, there is a man sitting in his - sofa and saying" I have so much books!", on the contrary. in the right-hand cartoon, a man sitting in his chair and saying" I try my best to read 20 books this year.”Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that active action is the brush paints bright future, while neglecting active action is the shackle that hinders progress.

批改：能够完整全面的描述出图画中的现象，并能够直接点明作文的主题。

原文：servial

批改：several

原文：foromost

批改：foremost

批改：加being

原文：mordern

批改：modern

原文：increasing

批改：increasingly副词修饰形容词

原文：The phenomenon is thought-provoking in servial ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foromost, active action can ignite our creativity and promote personal growth and self-fulfilment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than self-consuming. What is more, in mordern society full of changes, chances and challenges, perseverance has become a key factor that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people, and its significance has become increasing evident.

批改：该段落能够将图画背后蕴含的真实意义加以阐述，语言衔接连贯。能够运用逻辑关系词来连接句子，值得表扬。

原文：,

批改：分号

原文：detriment

批改：detrimental

原文：negjecting

批改：neglecting

原文：In brief, active action is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice, additionally, we must be actuely aware of the detriment effects of negjecting active action to ensure our growth stays on course.

批改：能够提出自己的建议，起到了总结和再次呼应主题的作用。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：15/20

内容切题，全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误；句式方面，注意句子结构的完整，不要缺少成分以及正确使用标点断句；语法方面，注意定语从句的完整。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节问题会更好。继续加油。

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