启航教育作为考研英语培训领域的知名品牌，每年都会整理发布当年的启航考研英语高分范文。本文呈现的2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文中，每一处失分点都已被老师精准订正，是2027考生不可错过的写作资料。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

2011大作文

必须使用黑色字迹书写:在答题卡区城内作答,超出黑色矩形边框限定区域的答案无效。 The bar chart clearly depicts the market proport. ion of some brands of different countries in Chinese car market in 2008 and 2009. In 2008, the percentage of domestic brand was approximately 26%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 31%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand experienced a significant decline of about 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of Amrican brand remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for the phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s manufactur-ing industry in responding to the needness of consummers. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation are accustomed to using domestic appliances and have be-come the primary consumer group.

What about future trends? I"m confident that the proportion of domestic brand will steadily increase in the follow decades. In contrast, the proportion of Amrican brand will likely continue to remain relatively stable.

必须使用黑色字迹书写:在答题卡区域内作答,超出黑色矩形边框限定区域的答案无效,

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三、考研英语作文批改

原文：Amrican

批改：American

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the market proport. ion of some brands of different countries in Chinese car market in 2008 and 2009. In 2008, the percentage of domestic brand was approximately 26%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 31%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand experienced a significant decline of about 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of Amrican brand remained stable and steady.

批改：能够准确地描绘出图表的信息，句子连贯完整。

原文：needness

批改：need可以做名词

原文：consummers

批改：consumers

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for the phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s manufactur-ing industry in responding to the needness of consummers. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation are accustomed to using domestic appliances and have be-come the primary consumer group.

批改：能够运用逻辑关系词分析图表中现象的背后原因，全面细致。

原文：Amrican

批改：

原文：What about future trends? I"m confident that the proportion of domestic brand will steadily increase in the follow decades. In contrast, the proportion of Amrican brand will likely continue to remain relatively stable.

批改：分析并预测了未来的趋势，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误，要正确了解单词的词性；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变；语法方面，总体来看语法基础较好。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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