作为考研英语备考的核心模块，2011年考研英语二大作文承载了大量学生的提分期待。本文带来的这篇批改例文，紧扣考研英语二写作冲刺常见话题，由启航教育资深英语教研团队逐句批改，详细标注语法、词汇与逻辑三大失分点，是考研英语写作提分的优质资料。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the market percentage of some brands of car in China from 2008 to 2009.In 2008 ,the percentage of domestic brands was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to 30%.In contrast the proportion of Japanese brands experienced a significant decline of about 10% during the same time. Simultaneously the percentage of American brands

remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our goverment has made tremendous effort-s to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power of the populace ,allowing them to affor of the automobiles that were previously dem--end luxury items. In addition against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic developme--nt ,the younger generation,particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic brand of cars and have become the primary consumer group.

What about future trends？I am confident that the proporation of domestic bands will steadily increase in the following decades.In contrast ,the proportion of Japanse brands will likely to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：an

批改：car brands

原文：st

批改：后加逗号

原文：ran

批改：car brands

原文：and

批改：car brands

原文：008 ,the percentage of domestic brands was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to 30%.In contrast the proportion of Japanese brands experienced a significant decline of about 10% during the same time. Simultaneously the percentage of American brands remained stable and ste

批改：第一段描述图表还是比较清楚的，数据准确，清晰，句子结构完整，比较符合英文写作要求。

原文：for of

批改：afford，不用加of，单词注意拼写

原文：m--e

批改：deemed

原文：ion

批改：后加逗号

原文：pme

批改：不用加横杆

原文：elevate the purchasing power of the populace ,allowing them to affor of the automobiles that were previously dem--end luxury items. In addition against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic developme--nt ,the younger generation,particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic brand of cars and have become the pr

批改：原因分析和现象解释还是比较到位的，句子写的也比较地道和专业，注意一些小错误哦

原文：n

批改：car brands

原文：a

批改：car brands

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11/15

语法：语法注意固定搭配不能写作哦，有的单词没有固定搭配，不能捏造哦，标点注意。

逻辑：整体逻辑可以的，整体很通顺。

词汇：单词整体还行，但是有写错的，注意修改。

内容：内容比较符合题意要求，结构合理。

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