一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2011年考研英语一批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语一作文范文教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、考研英语一2011年大作文题目

考研英语一2011年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2011年大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon,there are two tourists setting on a boat and throwing rubbish to the water,which pollute the water.Evidently,the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that pollution is an issue that requires great attention both in our personal lives and in society.

Thins phenomenonis thought-provoking in serval ways,but two of them are particularly singificant. First and foremost,tragically,although the lack of clear rules and regulations might contribute to this phenomenon,its root cause lies in the fact that some individuals,in their pursuit of economic interests,have disregarded the virtue of protecting environment.What is more,pollution is like a heavy chain that hinders our nation"s progress,not only hindering its ability to maintain healthy and rapid growth,but also significantly affecting its international image.

How can we put an end of the problem of polluyion？It is suggested by many that we need a package deal,including issuing related laws and enhancing supervision.But would these measures by comprehensive enough？In reality,we also need to strgenthen moral educcation.With the support of these measures,we can effectively tackle the issue at its core.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：setting

批改：sitting

原文：pollute

批改：which指的是前面扔垃圾这件事，应该是单数，所以pollutes单三

原文：wn in the cartoon,there are two tourists setting on a boat and throwing rubbish to the water,which pollute the water.Evidently,the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that pollution is an issue that requires great attention both in our personal lives and in society.

批改：能够完整全面的描述出图画中的现象，并能够直接点明作文的主题。

原文：Thins

批改：This

原文：phenomenonis

批改：phenomenon is

原文：serval

批改：several

原文：singificant

批改：significant

原文：Thins phenomenonis thought-provoking in serval ways,but two of them are particularly singificant. First and foremost,tragically,although the lack of clear rules and regulations might contribute to this phenomenon,its root cause lies in the fact that some individuals,in their pursuit of economic interests,have disregarded the virtue of protecting environment.What is more,pollution is like a heavy chain that hinders our nation"s progress,not only hindering its ability to maintain healthy and rapid growth,but also significantly affecting its international image.

批改：论述的内容较为全面，运用逻辑关系词使得句与句之间衔接较为紧密。注意避免小的语言错误。

原文：of

批改：put an end to

原文：polluyion

批改：pollution

原文：by

批改：be

原文：strgenthen

批改：strengthen

原文：educcation

批改：education

原文：How can we put an end of the problem of polluyion？It is suggested by many that we need a package deal,including issuing related laws and enhancing supervision.But would these measures by comprehensive enough？In reality,we also need to strgenthen moral educcation.With the support of these measures,we can effectively tackle the issue at its core.

批改：能够提出自己的建议，起到了总结和再次呼应主题的作用。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13/20

论述的内容全面，字数符合作文的要求，值得表扬，希望能够注意以下的小错误。

内容上：符合题目要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图画中的内容。

词汇上：基础词汇要避免拼写错误；

句式上：能够适当运用一些高级句式，望继续保持；

语法上：要注意主谓一致。

逻辑上：结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

修改建议：可以看出作文的内容还是比较全面的，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都比较的清晰，值得表扬。但是需要细心一些，建议养成检查的习惯，避免单词拼写错误导致不必要的丢分。继续加油，再接再厉。

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