启航教育考研英语教研组精心筛选了2011年考研英语二大作文真题原文及高分批改范例。本篇范文中，老师对每一句都给出修改建议，是考研英语二大作文备考资料库中的精品，特别推荐给参加2027考研的学子。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in market shares in the domestic car market from 2008 to 2009. In 2008. the percentage of domestic cars was approximately 25%, but by 2009. the figure had substaintally risen to 30%.. Meanwhile, the number of Japanese cars experienced a significant decline of 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the number of American cars remained stable and steady.

The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s car manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. In addition, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people"s attitudes towards domestic car have undergone significant changes. This explains why an increasing people choose domestic car .Considenng these factors, the depicted pnenomenon in the table is unsurpring.

What about furture trends? I am confident that the number of domestic is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadily increase. In contrast, the number of imported car will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

批改：语法正确

批改：逗号

批改：逗号

原文：number

批改：图中数字都是以百分数的形式存在的，此处改为 proportion 或者 percentage 更合适

原文：number

批改：改为 proportion 或者 percentage 更合适

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容

原文：reason

批改：下列描述了几个原因，此处改为复数 reasons

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确

原文：car

批改：可数名词单数形式不能单独存在，改为 cars

原文：an increasing

批改：越来越多的 …… 固定搭配 an increasing number of ……

原文：car

批改：可数名词单数形式不能单独存在，改为 cars

原文：pnenomenon

批改：phenomenon

原文：unsurpring

批改：unsurprising

批改：内容表达很好，原因的分析也很具体，多注意语法和拼写问题

原文：number

批改：改为 proportion 或者 percentage 更合适

原文：domestic

批改：此处为名词短语，domestic cars

原文： number

批改：改为 proportion 或者 percentage 更合适

原文：car

批改：可数名词单数形式不能单独存在，改为 cars

批改：结尾段表达很好

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，原因的分析与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在一些语法和拼写错误，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改 2. 拼写要细心。之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，尽量多使用自己的话来写，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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