正在备考考研英语的你，是否还在为2013年考研英语一大作文的写法犯愁？本文精选一篇高分组同学的批改例文，系统梳理考研英语作文万能句型的常考话题与写作框架。透过启航教育老师的逐段点评，你能直观感受高分作文的得分诀窍。

一、考研英语一2013年大作文题目

考研英语一2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly, 2) interpret its intended meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2013年大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon, there is a group of graduates standing in the life road and facing four choices which includes hunting for jobs , continuing studying , go abroad and start a business. Evidently ,the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that choosing your suitable roads plays an important and positive role in personal lives and in society.

The phenomenon is though-provoking in several ways , but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost , choosing suitable roads which you are interested in can ignite our creativity , and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment , thus making life rewarding and meaningful ,rather than being self -consuming. What is more ,In modern society full of changes, chances and challenges,

choosing approximate roads in which you can show your talents and gifts has become a key factor that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people , and its significance has become increasing evident.

In brief , choosing your suitable roads is the catalyst for societal and personal development , from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore ,we should actively advocate and support this practice . Only by doing so can we fulfill our aspirations.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：graduates

批改：加逗号

原文：in the life road

批改：改为 at the crossroads of life 是最地道的表达

原文：choices

批改：加逗号

原文： includes

批改：从句中的 which 指得是 four choices, 此处动词不用三单形式，改为 include

原文：go abroad and start a business

批改：此处都为动名词短语，改为 going abroad and starting a business

原文：your suitable roads

批改：改为 a suitable path, 带有比喻的意味时，写为 path 最合适

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图画内容, 表达的主题和图画也是贴合的

原文： studying

批改：使用名词 studies 更地道

原文： though

批改：thought

原文： suitable roads which you are interested in

批改：改为 a suitable path 即可

原文：In

批改：in 此处首字母不大写

原文：increasing

批改：副词修饰形容词，改为 increasingly

批改：内容表达不错，也比较具体

原文： your suitable roads

批改：改为 a suitable path

批改：结尾段表达很好

原文：approximate roads

批改：改为 a suitable path

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：14分/20分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明了个人观点，和图画的内容很贴合

语言表达：存在几处语法和拼写问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改 2. 拼写要细心 3. 主题词的英文表达要精确。之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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