思想品质、教育文化是考研英语大作文的高频命题方向，本文呈现的2011年考研英语二批改范例正是聚焦这一主旨。启航教育老师透过文章结构、衔接表达和结尾升华三方面，逐段展示了一篇考研英语作文真题范文高分范文的诞生过程。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of car market share chart in 2008 and 2009 IN 2008,the percentage of Chinese brand was 35%, but by 2009,this rate had decreased to 25%, Meanwhile, the proportion of Japanese brand slow increase 10% during the same period Simultaneously,the percentage of US brand remind stable and steady.

The core reasons of the observed phenomenoncan be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power of the populace,allowing them to afford automobiles that were previously deemed luxury items.In addition,against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development,the younger generation,particularly those in the 1990s and 2000s,are accustomed to using domestic car and have become the primary consumer group.Considering these factors, the depicted phenomejion in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends?I am confident that the proportion of Chinese brand will steadily increase in the following decades. IN contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand and US brand will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文： chart

批改：chart重复，删除

原文： IN

批改：前面用句号。In首字母大写

原文：period

批改：后面用句号

原文：brand

批改：brands​​品牌不止一个

原文：brand

批改：brands​​品牌不止一个

原文：brand

批改：brands​​品牌不止一个

原文：car

批改：用复数cars

原文：brand

批改：brands​​品牌不止一个

原文：brand

批改：brands​​品牌不止一个

原文： brand

批改：brands​​品牌不止一个

原文：was 35%, but by 2009,this rate had decreased to 25%

批改：数据有误，从25%增长到33%

原文：slow increase

批改：slowly decreased by日系车降了10%

原文：remind

批改：remained

原文：The bar chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of car market share chart in 2008 and 2009 IN 2008,the percentage of Chinese brand was 35%, but by 2009,this rate had decreased to 25%, Meanwhile, the proportion of Japanese brand slow increase 10% during the same period Simultaneously,the percentage of US brand remind stable and steady.

批改：描述有误，拼写错误较多

原文：phenomenon

批改：phenomenon后面加空格

原文：of

批改：for

原文：those

批改：those born

原文：phenomejion

批改：​​phenomenon

原文：The core reasons of the observed phenomenoncan be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power of the populace,allowing them to afford automobiles that were previously deemed luxury items.In addition,against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development,the younger generation,particularly those in the 1990s and 2000s,are accustomed to using domestic car and have become the primary consumer group.Considering these factors, the depicted phenomejion in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：词汇和句型丰富，注意语法和拼写

原文：IN

批改：In

原文：What about future trends?I am confident that the proportion of Chinese brand will steadily increase in the following decades. IN contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand and US brand will likely continue to decrease.

批改：good

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：8/15

1.作文内容包含全面，主题明确，层次清晰；

2.运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，但拼写错误较多，第一段对图表内容还原不够准确；

3.采用恰当的衔接手法，内容较为连贯；

4.要多学习老师讲的高分词汇和模板句型，正确运用，内化于心，减少失误，加油！

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