思想品质、教育文化是考研英语大作文的高频命题方向，本文呈现的2019年考研英语二批改范例正是聚焦这一主旨。启航教育老师透过文章结构、衔接表达和结尾升华三方面，逐段展示了一篇考研英语写作冲刺高分范文的诞生过程。

一、2019年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2019年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2019年考研英语二大作文批改例文

2019大作文：

The bar chart clearly depicts the percentage of where the students graduated from university went. In 2013, the percentage of working was 68.1%, but by 2018, this rate had substantially decreased to 60.7%. In contrast, the proportion of further education experienced a significant increase of 7.7% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of create careers remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound education system, enabling university students to have ample opportunities for further education. In addition, an increasing number of young people believe that in modern society full of changes, challenges and chances, further education is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the bar chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of further education will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of working will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：bar chart clearly depicts the percentage of where the students graduated from university went. In 2013, the percentage of working was 68.1%, but by 2018, this rate had substantially decreased to 60.7%. In contrast, the proportion of further education experienced a significant increase of 7.7% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of create careers remained stable and steady.

批改：你清晰地列出了主要数据，并正确使用了“substantially decreased”, “significant increase”, “remained stable and steady”等地道表达来描绘趋势，非常好

原文： core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound education system, enabling university students to have ample opportunities for further education. In addition, an increasing number of young people believe that in modern society full of changes, challenges and chances, further education is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the bar chart is unsurprising.

批改：本段从“政策支持”和“个人认知”两个层面分析原因，思路非常正确，完全切中要害。特别是第二点，指出年轻人在充满挑战的社会中认识到深造的重要性，分析得很深入

原文：hat about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of further education will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of working will likely continue to decrease.

批改：你对未来的预测基于前文分析，逻辑上是合理的

原文：eate caree

批改：create careers -> entrepreneurship 或 starting a business (“创业”的固定说法)

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13

同学，你的这篇作文展现了很好的审题和构思能力，能够抓住核心数据变化并展开有理有据的分析，这是非常可贵的能力！

为你提供几个小建议，希望能助你取得更高分数：

追求用词精准：在写作时，可以有意识地积累和使用图表作文的“核心词汇”，比如“进入职场”(enter the workforce)、“创业”(entrepreneurship)等，这能立刻提升文章的专业感。

平衡文采与简洁：在考场上，有时直接、清晰的分析比复杂的比喻更具冲击力。可以保留你的文采，但确保它不会影响核心论点的清晰和简洁。

保持结构优势：你构建“描述-分析-预测”框架的能力很好，请继续保持。

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