考研英语一真题每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2011年考研英语一批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、考研英语一2011年大作文题目

考研英语一2011年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2011年大作文批改例文

;he picture shows that two travelers sitting in the boat are dump trashes into the lake which is full of litters.

The illustration protrays a common phenomenon that when traveling around, travelers are always neglet the protection of the enviroment. And the result is that the garbages damage not only the inhabitat where animals live,but also the located vicinity .

It is a bad habit that all of us should opposite.In the aspect of people, people ought to comply liberal virtue to constructure a good feature to your firends or family.In the aspect of goverment, it is their responsibility to educate and alert people. For example, goverment should speard the significance of enviroment protection and post banner in a consious place to alert travelers.What" s more, hire some people to clean these trashes which is made by travelers on time is a must, lest the population comes to a trend that is out of our control.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：;he

批改：The

原文：dump

批改：dumping 用进行时

原文： neglet

批改： neglecting

原文：enviroment

批改：environment

原文： picture shows that two travelers sitting in the boat are dump trashes into the lake which is full of litters. The illustration protrays a common phenomenon that when traveling around, travelers are always neglet the protection of the enviroment. And the result is that the garbages damage not only the inhabitat where animals live,but also the located vicinity .

批改：描述漫画内容，揭示漫画背后所反映的社会现象和深刻哲理，清晰直观。

原文：opposite

批改：oppose 要用动词形式

原文： comply

批改：comply是不及物动词，这里要补充介词with

原文： goverment

批改：government

原文： goverment

批改：government

原文：consious

批改：conspicuous

原文：It is a bad habit that all of us should opposite.In the aspect of people, people ought to comply liberal virtue to constructure a good feature to your firends or family.In the aspect of goverment, it is their responsibility to educate and alert people. For example, goverment should speard the significance of enviroment protection and post banner in a consious place to alert travelers.What" s more, hire some people to clean these trashes which is made by travelers on time is a must, lest the population comes to a trend that is out of our control.

批改：以分论点的形式论述应对环境污染这一现象的举措，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：15/20

作文对漫画的理解到位，写作思路紧扣主题，有些短语句式的表达也不错，基本能够传达清楚作者的写作意图，但在以下几方面还需注意：

1.语法：个别句子从汉语角度看意思通顺，仔细分析其实句子成分不完整，不符合英语表达方式。

2.细节：作文中有几处比较明显的拼写错误。考试时可以多积累高级词汇，写作文就能用上，但尤其注意单词拼写不要出现明显错误，特别是与主题词相关的单词要重点留意。

3.内容：这幅漫画中细节比较多，但最核心的内容比较明确，那就是旅游过程中游客的不恰当行为造成环境污染。该图显示水面上有一艘观光船，两个游客随手乱扔垃圾，水面上漂浮着各种各样的废弃物。很多考生拿到试卷后的第一反应就是写如何保护环境，再细心一点的考生就写成如何保护景区环境。可是，这幅图不仅要强调被破坏的环境，还要强调造成这种环境污染的缘由——游客甚至是人类的不恰当行为。这样表达文章意思才全面。

整体来看，作文理解了漫画内涵，段落框架明确，大体上与题目要求保持一致，但是在表达上还存在一定问题。从点评中可以看出作文中有一些表述不当之处，基本是由汉语思维习惯而造成的表达错误，主要体现在词汇使用和搭配不当，后续继续注重练习，加油！

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