据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语写作模板话题连续多年成为考研英语二大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2011年考研英语二批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语二考生直接借鉴。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in market shares of certain brands in the domestic car market from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of domestic cars was approximately 25%, but by 2009. this rate had substantially risen to around 32%. Meanwhile, the proportion of Japanese cars experienced a significant decline of about 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American cars remained stable and steady

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of the high-speed advanced of society people"s attitudes towards domestic cars have undergone significant changes This explains why an increasing number of people choose domestic cars rather than oversea"s cars. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development. the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic cars and have become the primary consumer group. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends?I am confident that the proportion of domestic brands will steadily increase in the following decades.In contrast,The proportion of Japanese and American brands will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in market shares of certain brands in the domestic car market from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of domestic cars was approximately 25%, but by 2009. this rate had substantially risen to around 32%. Meanwhile, the proportion of Japanese cars experienced a significant decline of about 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American cars remained stable and steady

批改：用具体数据描述图表内容，清晰直观，但是建议在段落后面补充这些数据反映的社会现象

原文：changes

批改：注意断句，补充句号

批改：改为逗号

原文：e core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of the high-speed advanced of society people"s attitudes towards domestic cars have undergone significant changes This explains why an increasing number of people choose domestic cars rather than oversea"s cars. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development. the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic cars and have become the primary consumer group. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：以分论点的形式论述这一现象背后的原因，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：What about future trends?I am confident that the proportion of domestic brands will steadily increase in the following decades.In contrast,The proportion of Japanese and American brands will likely continue to decrease.

批改：总结全文，升华主题，展望未来，立意深远。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13 /15

这篇文章内容完整充实，结构清晰合理，逻辑严谨，层次分明，句型表达丰富。

词汇：考试时可以多积累高级词汇，写作文就能用上，但尤其注意单词拼写不要出现明显错误，特别是与主题词相关的单词要重点留意。

内容：在第二段分析原因时，我们可以有两个选择，一是只分析中国品牌占比上升的原因，二是可以加上日本品牌占比下降的原因，关于日本品牌占比下降的原因，可以写日本品牌一些不当行为导致其声誉下降，进而影响其销量等原因。

整体来看，主要是标点使用不规范，要多用自己的语言去进行表达，避免和范文重复，后续继续注重练习，加油！

复习考研英语大作文，务必要重视范文精读+专业批改的双向结合。启航教育2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班，专为冲刺阶段考生打造，从话题预测到写作模板一应俱全，是考研英语写作模板写作提分的可靠方案。