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一、2021年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2021年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and 2)give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2021年考研英语二大作文批改例文

According to the information depicted in the chart.It shows the distribution of citizens whose manner of exercise at glance, revealing a disparity in their preference. Exercise alone, exercise with friends, exercise with family and team activity account for 54.3%, 47.7%, 23.9% and 15.8%respectively.Especially, exercise alone ranks the first and exercise with friends ranks the second. Despite its apparent simplicity, the chart highlights the core information that a number of people is exercising for themselves.

A variety of reasons can be cited to accont for this phenomenon. In contemporary society, people"s pressure has become a potential and dangerous factor in their body with the fast development. The major of people believe that exerising will provide them with a healthier body, which may relases pressure in their life. There is no doubt that exercise is gradually becoming an important path to improve personal ability. Exercising can be done not only alone, but also with friends and family.

All in all, it is not difficult to draw the conclusion that exercising constint is constant popular in society, and government should promote the construct of equipments and environments, Never should we stop exercising.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：.It

批改：逗号，it小写

原文：manner

批改：manner不合适，改为 ways of exercise at a glance

原文：Exercise alone, exercise with friends, exercise

批改：改为动名词exercising

原文：exercise

批改：动名词exercising

原文：exercise

批改：同上

原文：According to the information depicted in the chart.It shows the distribution of citizens whose manner of exercise at glance, revealing a disparity in their preference. Exercise alone, exercise with friends, exercise with family and team activity account for 54.3%, 47.7%, 23.9% and 15.8%respectively.Especially, exercise alone ranks the first and exercise with friends ranks the second. Despite its apparent simplicity, the chart highlights the core information that a number of people is exercising for themselve

批改：注意动名词做主语这块儿知识

原文： accont

批改：account

原文：in their body with the fast development.

批改：不太自然 改为 affecting their well-being​ amid rapid development

原文： major

批改：The majority

原文：relases

批改：动词原形，release

原文：exercise

批改：动名词exercising

原文：A variety of reasons can be cited to accont for this phenomenon. In contemporary society, people"s pressure has become a potential and dangerous factor in their body with the fast development. The major of people believe that exerising will provide them with a healthier body, which may relases pressure in their life. There is no doubt that exercise is gradually becoming an important path to improve personal ability. Exercising can be done not only alone, but also with friends and family.

批改：用自己的语言挺好

原文：constint

批改：alone

原文：construct

批改：名词construction

原文：,

批改：equipment和environment不可数，后面句号。

原文：All in all, it is not difficult to draw the conclusion that exercising constint is constant popular in society, and government should promote the construct of equipments and environments, Never should we stop exercising.

批改：提出建议，呼应主题

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9/15分。

1. 题目要求：作文内容包含全面，主题明确，层次分明，但是语法错误也很明显，是失分的主要原因；

2. 语言表达：运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，定语从句，同位语从句和宾语从句句型很棒；

3. 行文逻辑：采用恰当的衔接手法，行文流畅，内容连贯；

4. 建议：原创度很高，点赞，要继续灵活运用模板，进一步丰富自己的语料库和写作思路，加油！

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