正在备考考研英语的你，是否还在为2015年考研英语二大作文的写法犯愁？本文精选一篇高分组同学的批改例文，系统梳理考研英语作文万能句型的常考话题与写作框架。透过启航教育老师的逐段点评，你能直观感受高分作文的得分诀窍。

一、2015年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2015年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2015年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The pie chart obviously and clearly mirrors

the proportion concerning acertain city"s population"s spending in Spring Festival. The chart consists of four sectors and clearly displays the percentage. Among them, the festival presents rank first,accounting for 40%, followed by transformation,having a meeting and other things constituting 20%.

The core reasons for the olserved phenomenoncan be summarized as follows. According to oneof the latest surveys conducted by a certainnationalauthority, almost 90% of respondentsmight hold the view that giving presents canconvey the friendship. Another crucial cause that people’s living stardards have improved accordingly our government has made tremedous efforts to drive economic growth.

From what has been discussed above, we

think the percentage of spending in Spring

Festival could increase people"s sense of

happiness and well-being.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：ansformati

批改：transformation 是“转型”之意，表示“交通”应为 transportation

原文： pie chart obviously and clearly mirrors the proportion concerning acertain city"s population"s spending in Spring Festival. The chart consists of four sectors and clearly displays the percentage. Among them, the festival presents rank first,accounting for 40%, followed by transformation,having a meeting and other things constituting 20%.

批改：你准确地描述了图表的核心数据，并使用了 accounting for, followed by 等地道结构，这很好！但存在用词不准确

原文：phenomenoncan

批改：olserved phenomenoncan 拼写错误，应为 observed phenomenon can

原文：rucial cause that people’s li

批改：第二个原因的句子 Another crucial cause that... 结构错误，缺少连接词或断句，导致表意不清。stardards 拼写错误，应为 standards。tremedous 拼写错误，应为 tremendous。

原文：core reasons for the olserved phenomenoncan be summarized as follows. According to oneof the latest surveys conducted by a certainnationalauthority, almost 90% of respondentsmight hold the view that giving presents canconvey the friendship. Another crucial cause that people’s living stardards have improved accordingly our government has made tremedous efforts to drive economic growth.

批改：你尝试从“情感表达”和“经济改善”两个层面分析原因，角度是合理且正确的。但论证的严谨性和句子结构的完整性是主要失分点

原文：om what has been discussed above, we think the percentage of spending in Spring Festival could increase people"s sense of happiness and well-being.

批改：只有一句话，过于简短，未能有效总结全文或对未来趋势给出看法。 结论 spending... could increase... happiness 的推导略显突兀，前文并未论证消费与幸福感之间的直接联系。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：8分

总评与修改建议：

同学，你的作文结构完整，包含了所有内容要点，并且能够使用一些高级词汇和论证方法，这说明你具备了良好的写作基础。

当前，你的问题在于

论述的严谨与精准：包括用词的选择、句子结构的完整，以及论证逻辑的严密性。

结尾的深化与拓展：结尾段需要更充实，能够呼应前文并提出有见地的看法。

给你的核心建议：

精炼语言：在描述图表时，力求准确和简洁。直接使用图表作文的常用词汇。

夯实论证：分析原因时，确保每个句子语法正确。优先选择最直接、最贴切的原因，并围绕它把道理讲清楚、讲透彻。

优化结尾：结尾段可以简要总结趋势，或基于你的分析提出一个合理、自然的观点或预测。

请继续保持练习，特别注意以上几点，你的写作分数一定会稳步提升！

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