一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2014年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二写作技巧教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chait clearly depicts the change of urban population ond rural population China between 1990 and 2010. In 1990, the number of urban population was 306, but by 2010, the figure had risen to 666. Meanwhile , the number of rural population experienced a decline of 160 during ohe same time .

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows . To start with , as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes , our government has made tremendous efforts to promot economic development, more people who live in rural can afford the cost to live in urban . In addition , an increasing number of young people believe that in modern society full of changes , challenges and chances , having a good job in urban is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run . Considering these factors , the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsupricing .

what abour future trends ? I am confident that the number of urban population is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadily increase in the following decades . In contrast , the number of rural population will likely continue to decrease relatively stable.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：chait clearly depicts the change of urban population ond rural population China between 1990 and 201

批改：chait 拼写错误，应为 chart。 ond 拼写错误，应为 and。 rural population 后缺少介词，应为 rural population in China。

原文：the number of urban population was 306, but by 2010, the figure had risen to 666. Meanwhile , the number of rural population experienced a decline of 160 during ohe same time .

批改：the number of urban population 搭配不当，直接使用 the urban population 更地道。 306 和 666 数据严重错误，且遗漏单位。图表明确显示单位是“百万 (million)”，正确数据应为 300 million 和 666 million。 160 同样遗漏单位，应为 160 million。 ohe 拼写错误，应为 the。

原文：bar chait clearly depicts the change of urban population ond rural population China between 1990 and 2010. In 1990, the number of urban population was 306, but by 2010, the figure had risen to 666. Meanwhile , the number of rural population experienced a decline of 160 during ohe same time

批改：这一段的结构是清晰的，使用了恰当的连接词（Meanwhile）。但是，数据描述的准确性是图表作文的生命线。单位和数值的错误是非常致命的，会严重影响评分

原文：promot

批改：promot 拼写错误，应为 promote。

原文：onomic development, more peop

批改：第一点原因写成了一个run-on sentence（连写句）。...promote economic development, more people... 是两个完整的句子，仅用逗号连接是错误的。应使用连接词改为 ...promote economic development, which enables more people... 或直接拆分为两句。

原文：o live in ru

批改：people who live in rural 后缺少名词，应为 rural areas。

原文：unsupricin

批改：unsupricing 拼写错误，应为 unsurprising。

原文：re reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows . To start with , as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes , our government has made tremendous efforts to promot economic development, more people who live in rural can afford the cost to live in urban . In addition , an increasing number of young people believe that in modern society full of changes , challenges and chances , having a good job in urban is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run . Considering these factors , the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsupricing

批改：你分析原因的角度很好，从政府经济政策和个人职业发展两方面展开，内容很切题。特别是第二个原因，逻辑很清楚。主要问题在于句子结构的完整性和一些词汇的准确性

原文：what abour

批改：what abour 拼写错误，应为 What about

原文：decrease relatively

批改：最后一句 decrease relatively stable 语法错误，形容词stable不能修饰动词decrease。应改为 decrease at a relatively stable rate 或 experience a steady decline。

原文：abour future trends ? I am confident that the number of urban population is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadily increase in the following decades . In contrast , the number of rural population will likely continue to decrease relatively stable.

批改：对未来趋势做出了预测

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：8

总评与修改建议：

同学，你的这篇作文在结构和内容上已经达到了及格以上的水平，框架完整，并且有自己的思考。但是，频繁的基础拼写错误和关键数据错误是当前阻碍你获得高分的主要障碍。

给你最迫切的建议：

在描述图表第一段时，请放慢速度，一个数字一个数字、一个单位一个单位地核对。这是图表作文的基石，一旦出错会扣很多分。

请务必花时间巩固基础词汇的拼写（如chart, and, the, promote等）。在考场上，写完一定要留出2-3分钟专门检查拼写和单复数，这能帮你挽回很多不必要的失分。

简化表达：在能够正确写出句子之前，可以暂时不使用特别复杂的比喻（如symphony of changes），先力求把每一个简单句写正确、写清楚。正确的简单句远胜于错误百出的复杂句。

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