启航教育考研英语教研组精心筛选了2011年考研英语二大作文真题原文及高分批改范例。本篇范文中，老师对每一句都给出修改建议，是考研英语二写作技巧备考资料库中的精品，特别推荐给参加2027考研的学子。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the change in market shares of certain brands in the domestic car

market from 2008 to 2009. I 2008, Japanese cars take the lead at 35%, followed by domestic cars at 25%, but by 2009. the rate of domestic cars rise to arround33%, In contrast the percentase of Japanese

has sharp decline of about 19%the percentge

of American cars stay a stably percentage

The core reasons for the observed phe nomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with,The Chima domestic cars didn"t develop

deeply and result lower than Japanese cars

In addition, In 2009, domestic cars increased

along with technology upgrowth In my view, the foundamental resson for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by china"ns manufacturing inclustry in responding to these changes .Considering these factors the depiced phenomenon in the Chart is unsurprising

What about future trends? I am confident that

the proportion of will steadily increase in the following decodes stable In contrast, the proportion of other cars will likely continue to remain relatively

stable

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三、考研英语作文批改

原文：in

批改：改为of比较好哦，表示...的

原文：erta

批改：some certain

原文：I

批改：In

批改：逗号

原文：rise

批改：had risen

原文：d3

批改：空格

原文：,

批改：句号

原文：ast

批改：后加逗号

原文：centas

批改：percentage

原文：nese

批改：后加car brands

原文：arp

批改：a sharp decline

原文：9%

批改：后加句号

原文：th

批改：大写

原文：ntge

批改：percentage

原文：tay

批改：stays keeps更好哦

原文：bl

批改：stable

原文：ntage

批改：后加句号

原文：ar chart clearly depicts the change in market shares of certain brands in the domestic car market from 2008 to 2009. I 2008, Japanese cars take the lead at 35%, followed by domestic cars at 25%, but by 2009. the rate of domestic cars rise to arround33%, In contrast the percentase of Japanese has sharp decline of about 19%the percentge of American cars stay a stably percenta

批改：这应该是第一段哦，注意段落结构要清晰哦。描述图表内容还是比较准确的，错误比较多，注意修改哦

原文：e n

批改：不留空格

原文：T

批改：小写

原文：him

批改：China

原文：result lower than Japanese cars

批改：这是想要说明啥呀？有点不知所云哦，结构和单词用法都是错的

原文：In

批改：小写

原文：th

批改：后加句号

原文： foundament

批改：fundamental

原文：esso

批改：reason

原文：china"ns

批改：China"s

原文：clust

批改：industry

原文：rs

批改：后加逗号

原文：epice

批改：depicted

原文：C

批改：小写

原文：ing

批改：后加句号

原文：core reasons for the observed phe nomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with,The Chima domestic cars didn"t develop deeply and result lower than Japanese cars In addition, In 2009, domestic cars increased along with technology upgrowth In my view, the foundamental resson for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by china"ns manufacturing inclustry in responding to these changes .Considering these factors the depiced phenomenon in the Chart is unsurpris

批改：这应该是第二段哦，句子写的比较乱，能看出来想要和范文一致，但是有的地方是不是记得不是很清楚，而自己又不知道怎么写，所以错误比较多哦，背诵范文一定要能记住哦，英文比较注重细节，

原文： of

批改：Chinese cars

原文：odes

批改：decades. 后加句号

原文：table

批改：删掉

原文：ble

批改：后加句号

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：5/15

语法：语法上注意句子一定要写对哦，不能丢任何成分，文中句子几乎没有完整的哦，标点要记得加哦

逻辑：整体逻辑可以的，但是错误太多，读起来不是很通顺。

词汇：单词整体错的太多了，注意加强记忆。

内容：结构还是不错的，内容比较贴合图表主题，但是错误很多，背诵范文要牢牢记住哦，不能错的哦。

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