据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语作文批改话题连续多年成为考研英语二大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2014年考研英语二批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语二考生直接借鉴。

一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes of population ofurban and rural during 20 years in China during 20years. In 1990, the number of urban population was 300 millions, but by 2010, the figure had substantially risen to 666 millions.In contrast, the number of rural population experienced a slow decline of 60 millions during the same time period.The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, an increasing number of young people believed that in modern society full of changes, challenges and chances, getting more work chances in urban is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run. In addition, against the backdrop of our

country’s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to living in towns. Considering these factors,the depicted phenomenon in chart is unsurprising.What about future trends, I am confident that the number of urban population will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the number of rural population will likely continue decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：of population ofurban and rural

批改：注意表达的顺序，形容词后面加名词，改为 in urban and rural populations

原文：during 20 years

批改：删去，后面已经写了时间

原文：20years

批改：中间加空格

原文：number of

批改：删去 number of, population 本身指的就是一个地区的“人口总数”。

原文：millions

批改：前面有具体数字时，这些数量单位不用复数形式，改为 million

原文：millions

批改：改为 million

原文：number of

批改：删去

原文： 60 millions

批改：注意数字表达的准确性，此处为 160 million

批改：此处写为第一段，内容表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容

批改：语法正确

原文：believed

批改：用一般现在时即可，改为 believe

原文：urban

批改：此处为名词短语，改为 urban areas

批改：语法正确

批改：此处写为第二段，内容表达不错，也很具体

原文：,

批改：此处为问号

原文： number of

批改：删去

原文：number of

批改：删去

原文：continue

批改：continue to do sth, 此处改为 continue to

批改：结尾段内容预测很合理

原文：work chances

批改：改为 job opportunities 更地道

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处语法问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：内容比较丰富具体，结构上建议写为三段式

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改 2. 标点使用要规范 3. 结构上建议写为三段式。之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，试着多用自己的话来写，总的来说写的不错，加油！

复习考研英语大作文，务必要重视范文精读+专业批改的双向结合。启航教育2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班，专为冲刺阶段考生打造，从话题预测到写作模板一应俱全，是考研英语作文批改写作提分的可靠方案。