考研英语一写作技巧每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2017年考研英语一批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目

考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文

必须使用黑色字迹书写:在答题卡区域内作答,超出黑色矩形边框限定区域的答案无效

In the left-hand cartoon, there is a man, laying on the chair and saying "I have so many books". on the contray, in the right-hand portrayal, a man is reading book. Evidurly, the cartoonist intends to convey to readerts that it is practice that plays an important and positive role bath in our personal lives and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly lignificant. First and foremost, while certain Chinese traditions may be outdated, the quality of practice is one that should never lose its luster, as it is an essential bend that keeps the Chinese nation thriving. What is more，in modern society full of changes, chances, and challenges, practile has become a key quality that distinguishes exceptional indivduals from ordinory people, and its significance has become increasingly evident.

In brief, Practice is the latalyst for social and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this quality. Only by doing so can we futill our aspirations.

必须使用黑色字迹书写:在答题卡区域内作答,超出黑色矩形边框限定区域的答案无效。

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三、考研英语作文批改

原文： left-hand cartoon, there is a man, laying on the chair and saying "I have so many books". on the contray, in the right-hand portrayal, a man is reading book. Evidurly, the cartoonist intends to convey to readerts that it is practice that plays an important and positive role bath in our personal lives and in society.

批改：本段准确地描述了漫画的对比内容，并清晰地引出了文章主旨

原文： laying on the chair and

批改：laying → 建议改为 lying。"lay"是及物动词，需要接宾语，而"lie"表示“躺”时是不及物动词。 on the contray → 拼写有误，正确拼写是 on the contrary

原文：eading book. Evidurly, the cartoonist intends to convey to readerts that it is practice that

批改：reading book → 可数名词单数需要冠词，建议改为 reading a book 或 reading books。 Evidurly → 拼写有误，正确拼写是 Evidently。 readerts → 拼写有误，正确拼写是 readers。 bath → 拼写有误，正确拼写是 both。

原文：s phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly lignificant. First and foremost, while certain Chinese traditions may be outdated, the quality of practice is one that should never lose its luster, as it is an essential bend that keeps the Chinese nation thriving. What is more，in modern society full of changes, chances, and challenges, practile has become a key quality that distinguishes exceptional indivduals from ordinory people, and its significance has become increasingly evident.

批改：本段的论证结构很清晰，从两个有说服力的角度阐述了实践的重要性

原文：ignificant. First and foremost, while certain Chinese traditions may be outdated, the quality of practice is one that

批改：lignificant → 拼写有误，正确拼写是 significant。 bend → 用词可以更精准。结合上下文，bond（纽带）或 trait（特质）可能是更贴切的词。 practile → 拼写有误，正确拼写是 practice。

原文：indivduals from ordinory people, and its significance has become increasingly evi

批改：indivduals → 拼写有误，正确拼写是 individuals。 ordinory → 拼写有误，正确拼写是 ordinary。

原文：rief, Practice is the latalyst for social and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this quality. Only by doing so can we futill our aspirations.

批改：结尾段很好地总结了观点并进行了呼吁，句式运用得当

原文：atalyst for social and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should

批改：latalyst → 拼写有误，正确拼写是 catalyst。 futill → 拼写有误，正确拼写是 fulfill。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：15

总评与修改建议

你的作文有一个非常清晰的框架，从描述、论证到总结，结构完整。论证部分从传统文化和现代竞争两个角度展开，体现了不错的思考深度，结尾的句式也运用得很出色。

目前，影响作文得分的主要因素是一些基础的词汇拼写和用法问题。建议你在完成写作后，能预留一点时间快速通读一遍，专门检查这类小错误。一个有效的方法是建立自己的“易错词本”，把经常拼错的词（如：significant, practice, individual）记录下来多看看。当这些细节处理得当时，你清晰的思路和良好的结构就能得到更好的展现，作文质量会再上一个台阶。

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