考研英语作文失分点多、提分空间大，一直是2014年考研英语二备考生核心痛点之一。本文围绕考研英语二写作冲刺话题，给出一篇经过启航教育老师精细批改的高分范文，文中不仅有逐句批注，还附有可复制的考研英语二高分写作模板。

一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

48. The bar chart clearly depicts the popilation"s change of rural area and urban area. In 1990, the number of urban population was 300 million, but by 2010, the figure has substaintially risen to 666 million. In contrast, the number of rural population expericed a slow decline of 160 million during the same period.

The core reason for the observed phenomen-on can be summarized as follows. To start with, As the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our goverment has made tremendous ff-orts to build a sound road system, enabling rural people d to have ample opportunities to go to the city. In addition, As the saying goes, "On life"s stage, pressure is awalys present? Nowadays, rural people are compelled to confront immense life"s pressure, and as a result, go to the city to make money has emeraged as their significant choice. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsur-prising.

what about future trends? I ame confident that the number of urban population will steadily increase in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：the popilation"s change of rural area and urban area

批改： the changes in urban and rural populations in China over a period of 20 years

原文： has

批改：过去完成时

原文：substaintially

批改：substantially

原文：expericed

批改：experienced

原文：phenomen-on

批改：phenomenon

原文：As

批改：首字母小写

原文：ff-orts

批改：efforts

原文：goverment

批改：government

原文：emeraged

批改：emerged

原文：awalys

批改：always

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the popilation"s change of rural area and urban area. In 1990, the number of urban population was 300 million, but by 2010, the figure has substaintially risen to 666 million. In contrast, the number of rural population expericed a slow decline of 160 million during the same period.

批改：意思对，注意拼写和语法错误

原文： reason

批改：下面不止一个原因，用复数

原文： d

批改：删除

原文：our goverment has made tremendous ff-orts to build a sound road system, enabling rural people d to have ample opportunities to go to the city.

批改：这句话说服力很弱

原文： As

批改：首字母小写

原文：?

批改：改为句号

原文：life"s

批改：搭配不自然，改为mounting 增长的

原文：go

批改：动名词，pushing them to move to the...

原文：unsur-prising

批改：去掉连字符

原文：what

批改：首字母大写

原文：ame

批改：am

原文：what about future trends? I ame confident that the number of urban population will steadily increase in the following decades.

批改：good

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：8/15分。

1. 题目要求：作文内容包含全面，主题明确，层次分明，但是拼写错误太多，影响正常阅读，；

2. 语言表达：运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，定语从句，伴随状语，非谓语结构和宾语从句句型很棒；

3. 行文逻辑：采用恰当的衔接手法，行文流畅，内容连贯；

4. 建议：要深刻吃透老师的模板，使用自己的语言，灵活运用在各类题目中，进一步丰富自己的语料库和写作思路，加油！

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