一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2021年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二真题教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、2021年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2021年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and 2)give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2021年考研英语二大作文批改例文

This bar chart clearly displays the percentage of survey on resident"s" exercising methods in a certain city.Eexercising without others takes the lead of 54.3%, followed by exercising with friends at 47.7%. Additionally, factors such as exercising with family and group activities are also considerated, accounting for 23.9% and 15.8% respectively.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of high-speed advancement of society, younger generation"s leisure time has been squeezed significuntly, so that exercising along would be the most efficient method in the era. What"s more, our friends are more likely to have a same interest in a certain sport rather than family.Last but not least, it"s easy to comprehend that because group activities need more participants so it account the least percentage. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon is unsurprising.

what about future trends? I"m confident that the above statistical figure accuraitely and truthfully reflect the chances of residents, serving as a microcosm of changes in the era, and likely ramain relatively stabe in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：Eexercising

批改：Exercising

原文：without others

批改：alone表示独自

原文：of

批改：用介词at

原文：considerated

批改：considered

原文：This bar chart clearly displays the percentage of survey on resident"s" exercising methods in a certain city.Eexercising without others takes the lead of 54.3%, followed by exercising with friends at 47.7%. Additionally, factors such as exercising with family and group activities are also considerated, accounting for 23.9% and 15.8% respectively.

批改：能够准确地描绘出图表的信息，句子连贯完整。

原文：significuntly

批改：significantly

原文：along

批改：alone

原文：so

批改：because和so不能同时出现，把so去掉

原文：account

批改：accounts for占比

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of high-speed advancement of society, younger generation"s leisure time has been squeezed significuntly, so that exercising along would be the most efficient method in the era. What"s more, our friends are more likely to have a same interest in a certain sport rather than family.Last but not least, it"s easy to comprehend that because group activities need more participants so it account the least percentage. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon is unsurprising.

批改：能够具体阐释出图表背后的真实意义，能够运用逻辑关系词连接句子，使得句与句之间衔接连贯，望继续保持。

原文：what

批改：what首字母大写

原文：figure

批改：复数

原文：accuraitely

批改：accurately

原文：chances

批改：changes

批改：加will

原文：stabe

批改：stable

原文：what about future trends? I"m confident that the above statistical figure accuraitely and truthfully reflect the chances of residents, serving as a microcosm of changes in the era, and likely ramain relatively stabe in the following decades.

批改：分析并预测了未来的趋势，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误，名词单复数要使用正确；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变，但是要注意句子结构的完整；语法方面，注意because和so在英语中不能连用。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的比较认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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