启航教育作为考研英语培训领域的知名品牌，每年都会整理发布当年的考研英语作文模板高分范文。本文呈现的2016年考研英语二大作文批改例文中，每一处失分点都已被老师精准订正，是2027考生不可错过的写作资料。

一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

The pie chart clearly displays the

precentage breakdown of a investigation of the

purpose of trip of the university students.Enjoying

the landscape takes the lead at 37%,

followed by relieving the pressure at 33%.

Additionally, making friends, developing independence

and other purpose are also considered, accounting

for 9%, 6% and 15%, respectively.

The core reasons for the observed

phenomenon can be summaried as follow.

To start with, as the saying goes," on life"s stage,

pressure is always present." Now days, university

students are compelled to confront immense

academic pressure, and as a result, trip has

emerged as their significant choice for utilizing

leisure time. In addition, as the conductor

orchestrating the symphony of changes, our

government has made tremendous efforts

to build a prefect transportation system,

enable university students to have ample

opportunities for travel. Considering these

factors , the depicted phenomenon in the

chart is unsprising.

What about furture trends? I am

confident the above statistical figures

accurately and truthfully reflect the

choices of the university students, serving

as a microcosm of the changes in the era,

and will likely remain relative stable in the

following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：a

批改：an

原文：purpose

批改：复数

原文：he pie chart clearly displays the precentage breakdown of a investigation of the purpose of trip of the university students.Enjoying the landscape takes the lead at 37%, followed by relieving the pressure at 33%. Additionally, making friends, developing independence and other purpose are also considered, accounting for 9%, 6% and 15%, respectively.

批改：将图表中的内容描述的很全面细致，无重大语法错误

原文：summaried

批改：summarized

原文：follow

批改：follows

原文：Now days,

批改：Nowadays

原文：enable

批改：改成enabling非谓语

原文：To start with, as the saying goes," on life"s stage, pressure is always present." Now days, university students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure, and as a result, trip has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time. In addition, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a prefect transportation system, enable university students to have ample opportunities for travel. Considering these factors , the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsprising.

批改：能够运用逻辑关系词分析图表中现象的背后原因，全面细致。

批改：加that

原文：relative

批改：改成副词relatively

原文：What about furture trends? I am confident the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of the university students, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relative stable in the following decades.

批改：能够对图表中的现象进行总结和预测，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误，名词单复数要使用正确，要注意区分词性；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变，但是要注意句子结构的完整；语法方面，注意非谓语的正确使用。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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