考研英语二写作冲刺每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2013年考研英语二批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、2013年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2013年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in part-time job situations among college students at a certain university. In the freshman year, the percent of taking part-time job was 67.77%, but by the junior year, the rate had gradually risen to 71.93%. In contrast, the proportion of taking part-time job experienced a significant increase of 16.31% from the junior year to the senior year.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, an increasing number of young people believe that in modern society full of changes, challenges, and chances, getting work experience through part-time job is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run. In addition, as the saying goes, "On life"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowadays, university students are compelled to confront immense financial pressure, and as a result, taking part-time job has emerged as their significant choice. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I"m confident that the proportion of taking part-time job will steadily increase in the following decade.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：What about future trends? I"m confident that the proportion of taking part-time job will steadily increase in the following decade.

批改：good

原文：ercent of taking part-time job

批改： ​​percentage of students taking part-time jobs

原文：taking part-time job

批改：students taking part-time jobs

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in part-time job situations among college students at a certain university. In the freshman year, the percent of taking part-time job was 67.77%, but by the junior year, the rate had gradually risen to 71.93%. In contrast, the proportion of taking part-time job experienced a significant increase of 16.31% from the junior year to the senior year.

批改：准确描述了图表的内容

原文：part-time job

批改：part-time jobs

原文：job

批改：jobs

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, an increasing number of young people believe that in modern society full of changes, challenges, and chances, getting work experience through part-time job is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run. In addition, as the saying goes, "On life"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowadays, university students are compelled to confront immense financial pressure, and as a result, taking part-time job has emerged as their significant choice. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：论据充分，词汇和语法结构丰富

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13/15分。

1.作文内容包含全面，主题明确，层次分明；

2.运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，定语从句，非谓语结构和宾语从句句型很棒；

3.采用恰当的衔接手法，内容较为连贯；

4.要多内化老师讲的高分词汇和模板句型，形成自己的语料库和写作思路，加油！

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