一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2016年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二写作冲刺教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of the purpose of travel among students at university.Enjoying views takes the lead at 37％,following by curing pressure at 33％.Additionally,factors such as making friends,practicing independence,and others are also considered,accounting for 9％,6％,and 15％,respectively.

The core reason for the phenomenon can follows. To start with,in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society,university student"s way of curing pressure have undergone significant changes.This explains why an increase number of them choose to traveling. In addition,the view is not only beautiful,but also relaxing,and it"s a way to increase knowledge.

What about future tends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choice of university students,and will likely remain relatively stable in the ffollowing decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文： purpose of travel among students at universit

批改：purpose -> purposes (学生的旅行目的有多种，应用复数) at university -> at a university (首次提及，应用不定冠词 a)

原文：ollowing by curing pressure at 33％.Additionally,factors such as making friends

批改：following by -> followed by (固定搭配错误) curing pressure -> relieving stress (搭配不当，cure 多用于疾病，缓解压力常用 relieve stress 或 reduce pressure)

原文：e pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of the purpose of travel among students at university.Enjoying views takes the lead at 37％,following by curing pressure at 33％.Additionally,factors such as making friends,practicing independence,and others are also considered,accounting for 9％,6％,and 15％,respectively.

批改：本段准确地列出了所有数据，很好地完成了图表描述的任务。

原文：e core reason for the phenomenon c

批改：The core reason for the phenomenon can follows. -> The core reasons for the phenomenon can be summarized as follows. (句子结构不完整，缺少谓语动词 be summarized，且 reason 应用复数)

原文：dent"s way of

批改：student"s way -> students" ways (所有格错误，主语是复数 students，其所有格是 students"，way 也应用复数 ways)

原文：ergone significant changes.This explai

批改：have undergone -> has undergone (主语 way 是单数，谓语动词应用单数) curing pressure -> relieving stress (同上，搭配不当)

原文：ncrease number of them choose to

批改：an increase number -> an increasing number (用词错误) choose to traveling -> choose to travel (choose 后接动词不定式 to do)

原文：he core reason for the phenomenon can follows. To start with,in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society,university student"s way of curing pressure have undergone significant changes.This explains why an increase number of them choose to traveling. In addition,the view is not only beautiful,but also relaxing,and it"s a way to increase knowledge.

批改：本段从“社会进步改变减压方式”和“风景的益处”两个角度分析原因，思路是正确的

原文：ends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choice of unive

批改：tends -> trends (拼写错误) the choice -> the choices (指代学生的多种旅游目的，应用复数)

原文：e ffollowin

批改：ffollowing -> following (拼写错误)

原文：hat about future tends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choice of university students,and will likely remain relatively stable in the ffollowing decades.

批改：结尾段对未来的预测合理，且与图表趋势一致。但出现了几处拼写和语法错误

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：总分与总评

总体得分：10分

总评：

同学，你好！这篇作文显示出你对图表作文的框架已经有了很好的把握，能够准确概括数据并展开分析，这是非常宝贵的能力。

1. 语言方面：

当前最需要关注的是语言的准确性与严谨性。文中出现了一些语法错误（如主谓一致、动词不定式）和搭配不当的问题。同时，将“relieving stress”误用为“curing pressure”这样的错误，暴露了核心词汇掌握的不足。请务必在写作后留出时间专门检查，确保核心词汇的搭配和基本语法规则的正确应用。

2. 结构方面：

你的三段式结构非常清晰。在内容上，可以进一步提升论述的深度与文采。第二个论点（欣赏风景的好处）的立意很好，但表达过于随意，像是口语聊天。将其改写为更书面化、内容更丰富的句子，能立刻提升文章的档次。

总的修改建议：

精准使用核心词汇：请重点记忆“旅行目的 (travel purposes)”、“缓解压力 (relieve stress)”、“培养独立 (cultivate independence)”等固定搭配。

仔细校对语法：养成检查的习惯，重点关注主谓一致、名词单复数和动词形式等常见错误。

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