据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语作文批改话题连续多年成为考研英语一大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2016年考研英语一批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语一考生直接借鉴。

一、考研英语一2016年大作文题目

考研英语一2016年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2016年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand cartoon, there is a man watching TV and saying to his son:" You must study hard!" On the contrary, in the right-hand, the man study with his son hardly. And one setence lying under the picture: Instead making demands, do an example is a better way. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that just saying and do nothing is the shackle that hiders progress, while learning from example is the brush that paints a bright future.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, an example can nurture our souls, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. On the other hand, just saying and do nothing not only hinders one"s success, but also acts as an Achille’s neel that can turn a final step towards heaven into a stepping stone towards hell.

In brief, example is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. Additionally, we must be acuitely aware of the detrimental effects of lambs in deeds to ensure our growth stays on course.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：:

批改：英语中用逗号即可

原文：right-hand

批改：后加cartoon

原文：study

批改：注意主谓一致studies

原文：hardly

批改：hardly是几乎不的意思，努力地是hard

批改：加there is

原文：setence

批改：sentence

原文：do

批改：doing动名词做主语

原文：do

批改：doing

原文：hiders

批改：hinders

原文：n the left-hand cartoon, there is a man watching TV and saying to his son:" You must study hard!" On the contrary, in the right-hand, the man study with his son hardly. And one setence lying under the picture: Instead making demands, do an example is a better way. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that just saying and do nothing is the shackle that hiders progress, while learning from example is the brush that paints a bright future.

批改：能够完整全面的描述出图画中的现象，并能够直接点明作文的主题。但是要避免语言上的小错误

原文：do

批改：doing

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, an example can nurture our souls, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. On the other hand, just saying and do nothing not only hinders one"s success, but also acts as an Achille’s neel that can turn a final step towards heaven into a stepping stone towards hell.

批改：能够通过正反两方面进行论述来突出论点，能够运用逻辑关系词，使得句子之间衔接较为连贯。

原文：acuitely

批改：拼写错误

原文：In brief, example is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. Additionally, we must be acuitely aware of the detrimental effects of lambs in deeds to ensure our growth stays on course.

批改：起到了呼吁和号召的作用，紧扣主题，语言连贯完整。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：14/20

内容切题，准确全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误以及注意区分词性；句式方面，句子结构较为完整连贯；语法方面，注意主谓一致问题以及动名词做主语。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节性错误会更好。继续加油。

复习考研英语大作文，务必要重视范文精读+专业批改的双向结合。启航教育2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班，专为冲刺阶段考生打造，从话题预测到写作模板一应俱全，是考研英语作文批改写作提分的可靠方案。