据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语写作模板话题连续多年成为考研英语二大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2023年考研英语二批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语二考生直接借鉴。

一、2023年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2023年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your essay, you should 1) describe and interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. Write your answer in about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2023年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The line chart clearly depicts the health literacy of our Citizen in 2012-2021. In 2012, the number of health literacy level was approximately 8.80%, but by 2021, this figure had substantially risen to 25.40%. In total, the number of health literacy level had risen by 17%!

The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with. Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation that is the significant progress made by Chinese healthy literacy level in responding to these changes. In addition, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people’s attitudes towards health have undergone significant changes. This explains why an increasing number of people’s health literacy level rising rather than updown. At the last but not least, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes. our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound health system, enabling chinese people to have ample opportunities for making directly decision to keep and improve the ability of their body healthy.

What about future trends? I am confident that the number of health literacy level is a clear sign of said improvement and steadily increase in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：the

批改：根据图画信息，改为 the level of

原文： of our Citizen

批改：改为 among residents in China

原文：in 2012-2021

批改：此处的表达不规范，改为 from 2012 to 2021

原文：number

批改：改为 level

原文：level

批改：删去

原文：reason

批改：下列有几个原因，此处写为复数 reasons

批改：语法正确

原文：At the last but not least

批改：Last but not least 此处为固定搭配

批改：改为 逗号

原文：chinese

批改：首字母大写

原文：decision

批改：可数名词单数形式不能单独存在，改为 decisions

原文：number

批改：改为 level

原文： level

批改：删去

原文： said

批改：social

原文： that

批改：此处写为从句不合适，建议直接写为两个句子，改为 and it

原文：healthy literacy level

批改：改为 healthcare industry

原文：an increasing number of people’s health literacy level

批改：改为 the health literacy level of an increasing number of people

原文：rising

批改：此处不能做谓语，改为 is rising

原文： updown

批改：改为 falling，与 rising 并列

原文：number

批改：改为 level

原文：level

批改：删去

原文：!

批改：开头段内容表达很清晰

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体，多注意语法问题

批改：结尾段表达很好

原文：keep and improve the ability of their body healthy

批改：改为 keep our body healthy and improve our physical condition biaod 更地道

原文： directly

批改：建议放在 decisions 的后面

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处语法和拼写问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改 2. 拼写要细心 3. 标点使用和首字母大小写要规范，之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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