考研英语二大作文每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2024年考研英语二批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、2024年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2024年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the chart below. In your essay, you should1) describe and interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. Write your answer in about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2024年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of survey on the main goals of students in the labor practice class of a college. Learned the relevant knowledge takes the lead at 91.3%, followed by improve the hands-on ability at 84.8%. Additionally, factors such as feel comfortable, enhance the ability of cooperation, accounting for 54.4%, 32.6%, respectively.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. An increasing number of younger people believe that in modern society full of changes, challenge and chances, labor practice is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run.

In addition, our government should make tremendous efforts to build a sound education system, enabling university students to have ample opportunities for further practice.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：goals

批改：获得acquirement

原文：Learned

批改：动名词做主语learning

原文：improve

批改：介词后加动词ing，改成improving

原文：feel

批改：feeling

原文：enhance

批改：enhancing

原文：cooperation

批改：这句话没有谓语，后加上：are also considered

原文：The bar chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of survey on the main goals of students in the labor practice class of a college. Learned the relevant knowledge takes the lead at 91.3%, followed by improve the hands-on ability at 84.8%. Additionally, factors such as feel comfortable, enhance the ability of cooperation, accounting for 54.4%, 32.6%, respectively.

批改：在描述图表信息时要注意语言的准确性。

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. An increasing number of younger people believe that in modern society full of changes, challenge and chances, labor practice is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run.

批改：论述内容较少，建议增加一至两点内容

原文：In addition, our government should make tremendous efforts to build a sound education system, enabling university students to have ample opportunities for further practice.

批改：能够对图表中的现象进行分析总结并提出自己的建议。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，介词后加动词ing形式；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变；语法方面，注意动名词做主语。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的比较认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题，另外，第二段的论述内容需增加。再接再厉。

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