考研英语作文失分点多、提分空间大，一直是2014年考研英语二备考生核心痛点之一。本文围绕考研英语二写作冲刺话题，给出一篇经过启航教育老师精细批改的高分范文，文中不仅有逐句批注，还附有可复制的考研英语二高分写作模板。

一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

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44年大作文.

The bar chart clearly depict the changes of the mount of between the urban people to rural people in China during the past 20 years .In 1990s, the rural populations was, 834 million, but by 2010s, the number has undergone significant decline to 674 million, In the same stage, the urban populations has experienced a stubstantially risen of about 366 million.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the saying goes: On life"s stage, pressure is always present."Nowadays, people are compelled to confront the immerce economic pressure, the rural labur have to find job in urban to earn more money. In addition, against the badidrop of country"s rapid and dynamic development, an increasing number of rural young people believe that the modern society full of changes, challenges and chances, the urban sound manufacture is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run. Considering these factors, the situation of the chart displays is unsuprising

what about future trend? I am confident that the number of urban population is a clear sign of social advancement and will stablely increase in the following decades. In contrast, the number of rural population will likely continue to decrease

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：depict

批改：单三depicts

原文：mount of

批改：amount数量，of去掉

原文：to

批改：and

原文：during the past 20 years

批改：from 1990 to 2010

原文：1990s

批改：年代不需要加s

原文：,

批改：逗号去掉

原文：2010s

批改：2010

原文：,

批改：句号

原文：populations

批改：单数即可

原文：populations

批改：单数population

原文：stubstantially risen

批改：substantial rise

原文：The bar chart clearly depict the changes of the mount of between the urban people to rural people in China during the past 20 years .In 1990s, the rural populations was, 834 million, but by 2010s, the number has undergone significant decline to 674 million, In the same stage, the urban populations has experienced a stubstantially risen of about 366 million.

批改：能够清晰的描绘图表中展现的内容，内容完整，注意避免小的语言错误。

原文：immerce

批改：immense

原文：the

批改：加so连词连接前后两个分句

原文：labur

批改：labors

批改：后加areas

原文：badidrop

批改：backdrop

批改：加in

原文：of

批改：改成that引导定语从句，否则这句话两个谓语

原文：unsuprising

批改：unsurprising

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the saying goes: On life"s stage, pressure is always present."Nowadays, people are compelled to confront the immerce economic pressure, the rural labur have to find job in urban to earn more money. In addition, against the badidrop of country"s rapid and dynamic development, an increasing number of rural young people believe that the modern society full of changes, challenges and chances, the urban sound manufacture is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run. Considering these factors, the situation of the chart displays is unsuprising

批改：能够运用逻辑关系词对图表中的现象进行分析论述，注意避免小的语言错误。

原文：what

批改：首字母大写

原文：stablely

批改：stably

原文：what about future trend? I am confident that the number of urban population is a clear sign of social advancement and will stablely increase in the following decades. In contrast, the number of rural population will likely continue to decrease

批改：分析并预测了未来的趋势，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：8/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误，名词单复数要使用正确，还要注意年份的正确写法；句式和语法方面，注意主谓一致以及句子结构的完整，要正确使用从句以及避免一句话出现两个谓语。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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