当你坐在考研英语二考场，面对2013年大作文题目的那一瞬间，是否能快速组织起一篇结构清晰、表达地道的高分文章？本文这篇批改例文，正是考研英语二写作技巧话题下的标准范本，适合每一位考研英语备考生反复研读。

一、2013年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2013年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of part-job of students at a certain university.A senior students takes the lead at 88.24%,followed by junior students at 71.93%.Additionally,factors such as freshman is also considerd,accounting for 67.77%.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with,as the saying goes,"On life"s stage ,pressure is always present."Nowdays, university students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure，thus，part-job has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time.In addition，an increasing number of young people believe that In modern society full of changes，challenges，and chances，part-job to heap experience isindispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run.Considered these factors，the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of younger people，serving as

a microcosm of the changes in the era ，and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：n of part-job of s

批改：part-job 是拼写错误，正确形式为 part-time jobs。

原文：.A senior students

批改：A senior students 存在单复数矛盾，应改为 Senior students。

原文：actors such as freshm

批改：factors such as freshman is also considerd 这一句存在多个问题： 用词不当：factors (因素) 用于描述原因，不能用来列举数据。直接说 The figures for... 即可。 主谓不一致：freshman 是单数，与复数动词 are 不搭配。应改为 freshmen are。 拼写错误：considerd 应为 considered。

原文：e bar chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of part-job of students at a certain university.A senior students takes the lead at 88.24%,followed by junior students at 71.93%.Additionally,factors such as freshman is also considerd,accounting for 67.77%.

批改：你准确地指出了最高和次高的数据，并使用了 takes the lead 和 followed by 等地道表达，这很好。但本段的主要问题在于：1) 关键术语的拼写错误；2) 列举数据时使用了不恰当的词汇(factors)；3) 遗漏了一个年级的完整数据。图表描述要求全面准确，漏掉任何一组数据都会失分。

原文：Nowdays,

批改：Nowdays 拼写错误，应为 Nowadays

原文：part-job to

批改：part-job again，应为 part-time jobs。

原文：eap experience is

批改：part-job to heap experience 表达错误且不完整。heap (堆积) 用在此处不恰当，应改为 accumulate/gain experience。整个部分应重构为 gaining experience through part-time jobs is indispensable。

原文：ndispensable

批改：isindispensable 应分开，改为 is indispensable

原文：Considered these factors，

批改：Considered these factors 语法错误，应为 Considering these factors。

原文：e core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with,as the saying goes,"On life"s stage ,pressure is always present."Nowdays, university students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure，thus，part-job has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time.In addition，an increasing number of young people believe that In modern society full of changes，challenges，and chances，part-job to heap experience isindispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run.Considered these factors，the depicted phenomenon in the chart is uns

批改：本段的框架非常清晰，从“压力”和“积累经验”两个角度展开，这是很好的思路。第二个原因（积累经验）尤其贴切。第一个原因的观点可以保留，但需要将“压力”的类型调整得更为合理（如改为经济或就业压力），这样论证会更有力。同时，本段的语言准确性问题是主要的失分点。

原文：f younger peopl

批改：younger people 范围过大，图表讨论的是大学生，应改为 university students 或 young students。

原文：ing as a microcosm of the changes in the era ，and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades

批改：长句的主语是 the statistical figures (数据)，但后半句 will likely remain stable (将保持稳定) 的主语应该是“趋势”或“比例”，逻辑主语不一致。建议修改为：I am confident that this trend, which reflects... and serves as..., will likely remain

原文：bout future trends? I am confident that the statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of younger people，serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era ，and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decade

批改：你明确给出了未来预测，并进行了总结，这很好。核心问题还是在于句子的逻辑主语要统一，确保语法严谨。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11分

你的这篇作文展现出你对整个文章结构的把握已经非常成熟了！

当前，阻碍你获得更高分（12分甚至以上）的最大障碍是反复出现的词汇拼写错误和部分语法偏差。

给你的核心提升建议：

建立个人“错题本”：请专门记录你高频拼错的词，比如 part-time job, Nowadays, Considering。在考前反复温习，下笔时就会条件反射般写对。

追求论证的精准度：在选择论点时，多问自己一句：“这个原因是否直接且合理？” 将“学业压力”改为“经济压力”或“就业压力”，论证力道瞬间就提升了。

写完后的“三分钟检查”：务必留出时间，只做一件事：逐词扫描，检查拼写和最基本的语法（如主谓一致、动词形态）。这个习惯能帮你挽回不少分数。

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