一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2021年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二真题教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、2021年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2021年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and 2)give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2021年考研英语二大作文批改例文

2014大作文

左久题目的答题反域内作答,超出答题区域的答案无效

节 姓名 The bar chart clearly displays the breakdown of exercies ways of ents of clivizen in certain city. Taking exercles alone takes lead at 54.3%, followedby taking exercies with friends at 47.7%. The factors such as taking exercies with family and with team are considered, accounting for 23.9% and 15.8%, respectively.

The core reason of this phenomenon can be summorized as followed. To start with, in the wake of high-speed the adva advancement of our society, people are no longer content with more iramaterial satisfation; they also pursue life quiality. The reason why an increasing number of people choose exerases to stay health. changes In addition, as a conductor orchethating the symphony of our government has made efforts to build a sound sports system, enabling people to have many exercises ways. Therefore, this depicted phenomonon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that taking exercises will remain relatively increaing.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：ak

批改：前面加percentage

原文：ents of clivizen

批改：residents

原文：rt

批改：a certain

原文：xe

批改：exercise

原文：edby

批改：注意空格

原文：cies

批改：exercise

原文：rc

批改：exercise

原文：akes lead at 54.3%, followedby taking exercies with friends at 47.7%. The factors such as taking exercies with family and with team are considered, accounting for 23.9% and 15.8%, respectively.

批改：数据还是比较清楚明确的，句子结构合理，注意一些错误哦，

原文：n

批改：加s

原文：of

批改：for

原文：moriz

批改：summarized

原文：owe

批改：follows

原文：the adva advance

批改：advancement

原文：amateri

批改：material

原文：isfa

批改：satisfaction

原文：uiali

批改：quality

原文：xerases to

批改：exercise

原文：changes

批改：删掉

原文： a

批改：the

原文：tha

批改：orchestrating

原文：of

批改：of后面是不是漏了单词？背诵不完整哦，our前面要加逗号

原文：wake of high-speed the adva advancement of our society, people are no longer content with more iramaterial satisfation; they also pursue life quiality. The reason why an increasing number of people choose exerases to stay health. changes In addition, as a conductor orchethating the symphony of our government has made efforts to build a sound sports system, enabling people to have many exercises ways. Therefore, this depicted phenomonon in the chart is uns

批改：内容其实还是比较贴合主题的，句子结构比较合理，但是有的句子写的不是很好哦，注意修改

原文：atively increa

批改：increasing

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：7/15

语法：语法上注意单复数，空格，句子不能写乱哦，一乱成分就会乱，语法就会错，背诵模板一定要准确，丢了一个单词，语法可能就错了。

逻辑：整体逻辑可以的。

词汇：单词整体还行，但是写错了很多单词哦，注意一些词汇使用的适当性哦。

内容：内容比较符合英文作文写作要求，结构合理。

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