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一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts some brands of proportion at the car market. In 2008, the number of chinese brand was twenty-five percent, but by 2009, this proportion gradually increased to over the thirty percent. In contrast the proportion of japanese brand slow decline about eight percent during the same from 2008-2009. Simultaneously, the percentage of american remained stuble and steady.

The reason for this result might be as follows. To start with, China holded the olympic games in 2008, People’s enthusiasm for domestic products has increased, so the proportion increased for the car sales. In addtition, chinese car compared more suitable chinese’s aesthetic than import car. Considering these factors, the depictsd phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of chinese brand will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of japanese brand and american brand will likely continue to remain relatively stable.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：chinese

批改：首字母大写

原文：japanese

批改：首字母大写

原文：american

批改：首字母大写

原文：some brands of proportion

批改：the market share of some car brands

原文：the

批改：去掉the

原文：slow decline

批改：slowly declined

原文：same

批改：少个period

原文：stuble

批改：stable

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts some brands of proportion at the car market. In 2008, the number of chinese brand was twenty-five percent, but by 2009, this proportion gradually increased to over the thirty percent. In contrast the proportion of japanese brand slow decline about eight percent during the same from 2008-2009. Simultaneously, the percentage of american remained stuble and steady.

批改：优化：The bar chart clearly depicts the ​​market share​​ (或 proportion) of some car brands. In 2008, Chinese brands accounted for 25% of the market. By 2009, this proportion had gradually increased to over 30%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brands ​​saw a slow decline of​​ about 8% during the same period (from 2008 to 2009). Meanwhile, the percentage of American brands remained stable.

原文：holded

批改：hosted

原文：olympic games

批改：大写Olympic Games

原文：,

批改：此处用句号，或者后面用which boosted people’s enthusiasm...

原文：so the proportion increased for the car sales

批改：the sales proportion of Chinese car brands rose

原文：chinese

批改：首字母大写

原文：chinese

批改：首字母大写

原文： import

批改：imported

原文：car

批改：cars

原文： chinese car compared more suitable chinese’s aesthetic than import car.

批改：Chinese cars are more in line with Chinese consumers’ aesthetic preferences than imported cars原句无谓语，改为完整的句子结构

原文：depictsd

批改：depicted

原文：The reason for this result might be as follows. To start with, China holded the olympic games in 2008, People’s enthusiasm for domestic products has increased, so the proportion increased for the car sales. In addtition, chinese car compared more suitable chinese’s aesthetic than import car. Considering these factors, the depictsd phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：优化：The reasons behind this trend are as follows. To start with, China hosted the Olympic Games in 2008, which boosted people’s enthusiasm for domestic products. As a result, the sales proportion of Chinese car brands rose. Additionally, Chinese cars are more in line with Chinese consumers’ aesthetic preferences than imported cars. Considering these factors, the phenomenon shown in the chart is unsurprising.

原文：chinese

批改：首字母大写

原文：brand

批改：brands

原文：will likely continue to

批改：简化为are likely to remain

原文：reason

批改：reasons

原文： japanese

批改：首字母大写

原文：american

批改：首字母大写

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：5/15

1.作文内容包含基本全面，主题明确，但字数偏少，尽量往200字靠；

2.尝试运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇；

3.有多处语法结构及词汇方面的错误，影响对写作内容的顺畅理解；

4.采用恰当的衔接手法，内容较为连贯性；

5.要多学习老师讲的高分词汇和模板句型，取长补短，减少失误，加油！

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